The two main problems are:
1) a lot of incorrect "the"; We generally don't use "the" with "knowledge" or other 'abstract' nouns (though sometimes we do). You have used the zero article correctly on a number of occasions.
2) a lot a run on sentences, which should be split, or divided with a colon (:) or a dash ( - ).
Make sure you understand why the commas don't belong in this sentence.
Those people, who insist that jobs are final stages, claim that universities should provide knowledge linked to the workplace.
If you're not sure why, ask.