jenny dau
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Thesis: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To What extent do you agree or disagree ?
hihi please check it for me both grama and vocabulary. I spent 4 hours writing this essay.
I can't afford to go to English Center, so please read and leave any feedbacks. God bless you
Some people argue that when employees have applied for a positon, the most important consideration is salary. However, I partly agree with this point of view and believe that other factors should be concerned
On the one hand, It's undeniable that money plays a essential role in employee's life. First, money enables them to meet daily basic needs. For instance, it canbe used for paying food, house, transport, bills and healthcare which are our basic survival needs. In addition, the lack of money make them not to afford to raise their children, to go on holiday, to pursue their hobbies which lead to a pleasure life. That is also the reason for why more and more people quit present jobs in order to seek well- paid jobs
On the other hand, whether or not money is the only factor affecting employee's decision when choosing a job. I think that other factors are equally important. First, many people would rather to apply for a low-paid job with friendly workplace environment than a high-paid job with harmful workplace environment because the cost of health care maybe far outrweigh the benefit from those jobs. Secondly, getting promotion is one of the main factor which has effect on employees. Many staff believe that getting higher position make them feel happier and more satisfying than gaining much money. Finally, there are innumerable cases in all society, pointing out that many groups of people are working without salary. The volunteers and non-government organisations get involved in the works based on their social responsibilities instead of earing money
Inconclusion, there are many factors which could affect us when choosing a job. I believe that salary is not the only consideration and other factors should be concerned
hihi please check it for me both grama and vocabulary. I spent 4 hours writing this essay.
I can't afford to go to English Center, so please read and leave any feedbacks. God bless you Some people argue that when employees have applied for a positon, the most important consideration is salary. However, I partly agree with this point of view and believe that other factors should be concerned
On the one hand, It's undeniable that money plays a essential role in employee's life. First, money enables them to meet daily basic needs. For instance, it canbe used for paying food, house, transport, bills and healthcare which are our basic survival needs. In addition, the lack of money make them not to afford to raise their children, to go on holiday, to pursue their hobbies which lead to a pleasure life. That is also the reason for why more and more people quit present jobs in order to seek well- paid jobs
On the other hand, whether or not money is the only factor affecting employee's decision when choosing a job. I think that other factors are equally important. First, many people would rather to apply for a low-paid job with friendly workplace environment than a high-paid job with harmful workplace environment because the cost of health care maybe far outrweigh the benefit from those jobs. Secondly, getting promotion is one of the main factor which has effect on employees. Many staff believe that getting higher position make them feel happier and more satisfying than gaining much money. Finally, there are innumerable cases in all society, pointing out that many groups of people are working without salary. The volunteers and non-government organisations get involved in the works based on their social responsibilities instead of earing money
Inconclusion, there are many factors which could affect us when choosing a job. I believe that salary is not the only consideration and other factors should be concerned
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