Maria rides a bike

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Maria rides a bike rather than drives a car because she feels that her health has greatly improved since she started riding.
 

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Maria rides a bike rather than driving a car because she feels that her health has greatly improved since she started riding a bike.

It needed a couple of changes.
 

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How about riding one?
 

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Could "driving" be left out?
 

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Maria rides a bike rather than drives a car because she feels that her health has greatly improved since she started riding.

Maria rides a bike rather than driving a car as she feels her health has greatly improved since riding.

This makes more sense as the original sentence sounds like a 'run on' sentence (Too long).
 

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You need to read the Forum guidelines before answering any more questions. At a minimum your responses must acknowledge that you are not a teacher.
 

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Maria rides a bike rather than driving a car as she feels her health has greatly improved since riding.

This makes more sense as the original sentence sounds like a 'run on' sentence (Too long).

Shorter is not always better.
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1) The sentence has poor logic. It doesn't make sense to say that the fact that her health has improved since she started is the reason she does it. It's the reason she continues to do it.

2) If you keep the first part as it is, you must use drives. The suggested driving from post #2 is not grammatical.
 
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