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[Gaya87]

Please help me to correct my summary paragraphs if there are any grammatical mistakes. Thank you.

1. A lawyer and an architect’s almost-failed arranged marriage worsens when their siblings enter the picture.

2. An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. The marriage turns out tumultuous, as their ego and past failures quickly afflict the already-failing relationship. It just keeps on rolling downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.

 

[tedmc]

What does the intimate relationship between the couple's siblings have to do with the couple's relationship?

It is normally "going downhill", not rolling downhill.

Since the present tense tense is used, shouldn't it be "almost-failing relationship"instead if "almost-failed relationship"?

 

[Gaya87]

What does the intimate relationship between the couple's siblings have to do with the couple's relationship?

Actually, the elder siblings were previously in a relationship with each other and ended two decades ago.

I've made some changes to the second summary. Please take a look at it, thank you.

An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their ego and past romance failures caused various conflicts in their lives. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.

 

[tedmc]

An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their egos and past romance failures caused various conflicts in their lives. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.

 

[tedmc]

An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their egos and past romance failures caused various conflicts [STRIKE]in [/STRIKE]to their [STRIKE]lives[/STRIKE] relationship. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] had once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.

 

[Gaya87]

Thank you. Also, I have revised the first summary. Let me know if any changes need to be made. Thank you sir.

A lawyer and an architect’s almost-failing arranged marriage. However, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Can love blossom again between them?

 

[tedmc]

The first sentence is not complete.

 

[Gaya87]

The first sentence is not complete.

How about this?

A couple tries to build a loving relationship however, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?

 

[Gaya87]

How about this?

A couple tries to build a loving relationship however, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?

Or

Daniel and Diana's marriage arranged by their families however their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?

 

[tedmc]

Daniel and Diana are arranged by their families to be married. However, their egotisms and past failures spoil their relationship, until their siblings come to their rescue.

It does not seem to be an arranged marriage. The couple are introduced to each other by their families and the relationship develops, albeit with hitches.

 

[Gaya87]

Daniel and Diana are arranged by their families to be married. However, their egotisms and past failures spoil their relationship, until their siblings come to their rescue.
The first sentence should I replace as: An architect named Daniel is arranged to be married Diana, a lawyer by their families.

It does not seem to be an arranged marriage. The couple are introduced to each other by their families and the relationship develops, albeit with hitches.

Yes, it's like arranged marriage blossomed into love. By the way, what does it mean for albeit with hitches?

 

[Tarheel]

There are problems. Bumps in the road.

I think "egos" is better than "egotisms" here.

 

[Gaya87]

Hope this is good to go:

An arranged marriage is set up to an architect named Daniel and Diana, a lawyer by their families. However, their egos and past failures spoil their relationship, until their siblings come to their rescue.

 

[Tarheel]

That's good. The only thing you need there is a comma after "lawyer". Short and sweet. (Edited to add that you might want to replace "to" with "between" (marriage between).

 

[Tarheel]

You might also say:

A marriage between Daniel, an architect, and Diana, a lawyer, is arranged (or "set up") by their families. However, their egos and past failures spoil their relationship until their siblings come to their rescue.

 

[tedmc]

From the sound of it, I do think think it can be considered a marriage. The couple are introduced to each other by their families with a view to getting them married. The marriage is subject to how their relationship turns out. In a traditionally arranged marriage, a couple would not have the option to back out. No?

 

[Tdol]

An arranged marriage is set up to

Between not to. For could also work.

 

[Barb_D]

It's not clear now if they were actually married, or if the marriage is planned for the future.

 

[Raymott]

Part of the reason for the lack of clarity is that the sentence/passage is in the present tense. It sounds like the description of a romantic comedy movie. "Daniel and Diana are arranged by their families to be married. However, their egotisms and past failures spoil their relationship, until their siblings come to their rescue." You're not supposed to know whether they marry or not until you've watched the movie.

 

[Barb_D]

Ah, I see. I was reading it as a drama - they were forced to marry but they couldn't make their marriage a good one.
I like your interpretation better!