[Grammar] Would you give me some advice please?

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KSSEEJ

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[FONT=&quot]Here comes my paragraph"
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[FONT=&quot]"In short term, providing more funding to food banks to provide a [/FONT][FONT=&quot]larger[/FONT][FONT=&quot] variety of foods [/FONT][FONT=&quot]is the right way. However, some people in need are unable to cook for themselves, due to the lack of time and cooking facilities in their living places, but cannot afford to buy a nutritious meal. With reference to the hot-meal services to the elderly by non government organizations(NGOs), the government can provide financial resources for NGOs having kitchens in their community facilities to provide these people with subsidized nutritious [/FONT][FONT=&quot]meal."[/FONT]


Is the underlined sentence too sticky or even wrong in structure?


Is the preposition phrase " With reference to " rightly used ( I intentionally mean take a guide from the hot meal services of NGOs?


Thanks so much for any advice!
 
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"For the short term, providing more funding to food banks to provide a [FONT=&quot]larger[/FONT][FONT=&quot] variety of foods [/FONT][FONT=&quot]is the right way. However, some people in need are unable to cook for themselves, due to the lack of time and cooking facilities in their living places, and cannot afford to buy a nutritious meal. In regards to hot-meal services to the elderly by non government organizations(NGOs), the government can provide financial resources for NGOs having kitchens in their community facilities to provide subsidized nutritious [/FONT][FONT=&quot]meal."[/FONT]

 

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Susiedq, Thanks for your rectification.

But I wanna know if "In regards to" means "concerning"? If yes, Can it fit my intentions to means " Take the experience of the hot meal services for the elderly as a guide and try to use it in helping those people who cant cook and afford a nutritious meal "?

Maybe I have confused you in the original post, would you give me some advices
 

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Susiedq, Thanks for your rectification.

But I want to know if "In regards to" means "concerning"? If yes, Can it fit my intentions to mean " Take the experience of the hot meal services for the elderly as a guide and try to use it in helping those people who cant cook and afford a nutritious meal "?

Maybe I have confused you in the original post, would you give me some advices
[FONT=&quot]Using hot-meal services to the elderly by non government organizations(NGOs) as a model, the government can provide financial resources for NGOs having kitchens in their community facilities to provide subsidized nutritious [/FONT][FONT=&quot]meal."[/FONT]
 
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