Sentences correction

[Twist]

Hello there, teachers.

Would you mind pointing out the errors in my sentences and fixing them. I'd appreciate it.

Due to a potential economic collapse that could ensue from the pandemic, the government has devised a scheme in order to shore up the health sector by providing a substantial endowment to medical centers. The plan will set in motion once the outbreak has been entirely eradicated.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hello there, teachers.

Would you mind pointing out the errors in my sentences and fixing them. I'd appreciate it.

Due to [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the potential economic collapse that could [STRIKE]ensue[/STRIKE] result from the pandemic, the government has devised a scheme [STRIKE]in order[/STRIKE] to shore up the health sector by providing a substantial endowment to medical centers. The plan will be set in motion once the outbreak has been entirely eradicated.

Welcome to the forum. :hi:

Please see my suggested changes above. You don't really need "potential" and "could" - they have the same effect on the sentence. I'd remove "potential".

 

[Twist]

Thanks, teacher. Why does ensue not work in my first sentence?

 

[emsr2d2]

Thanks. [STRIKE]teacher.[/STRIKE] Why does "ensue" not work in my first sentence?

Apologies. I meant to explain why I had changed that. Technically, "ensue from" is OK. However, in BrE at least, it's usually used intransitively. I would change the word order in order to use it.

Due to the pandemic, and the economic collapse that could ensue, the government has devised a scheme ...

 

[Tarheel]

Thanks, teacher. Why does "ensue" not work in my first sentence?

I'll let Ems answer that.

(Cross posted.)

 

[Twist]

Thx a ton.

 

[emsr2d2]

[STRIKE]Thx[/STRIKE] Thanks a ton.

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