Rezafo
Junior Member
- Joined
- Aug 11, 2011
- Member Type
- Interested in Language
- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
1. Please correct and suggest changes, and assess the likely band score for my passage.
2. I know the conclusion paragraph is pretty short, but tell me how I can expand the idea when I have said all I wanted to say in these two lines, and I couldn't think of any more words.
IELTS, Writing task 2
Topic: Some people believe that the best way to learn anything is "learning by doing". Others would rather learn through books and from teachers. Think of learning a language. Which way do you think is a better way to learn a language?
I believe that learning a language will be done better and more effectively if we learn it by doing that and getting engaged in it. Books give a lot of information, but they're not practical. We need to put them in practice.
When we do something, it can have fun or shocking feedback, so the impact of its educational aspects would linger longer in our mind, rather than merely reading and memorizing information and data from the books.
When you try to speak in real situation you will instantly be altered of your mistakes and you try to improve both the situation and the language usage. Similarly, when you sit down and start writing, you experience your weak and good points which this experience cannot be materialized through only reading tips and techniques. In the same way, this is different from learning plenty of hints and tips from the instructors.
All in all, while learning though books and from teachers is useful and worthy, I personally advocate more the learning by doing and practicing.
2. I know the conclusion paragraph is pretty short, but tell me how I can expand the idea when I have said all I wanted to say in these two lines, and I couldn't think of any more words.
IELTS, Writing task 2
Topic: Some people believe that the best way to learn anything is "learning by doing". Others would rather learn through books and from teachers. Think of learning a language. Which way do you think is a better way to learn a language?
I believe that learning a language will be done better and more effectively if we learn it by doing that and getting engaged in it. Books give a lot of information, but they're not practical. We need to put them in practice.
When we do something, it can have fun or shocking feedback, so the impact of its educational aspects would linger longer in our mind, rather than merely reading and memorizing information and data from the books.
When you try to speak in real situation you will instantly be altered of your mistakes and you try to improve both the situation and the language usage. Similarly, when you sit down and start writing, you experience your weak and good points which this experience cannot be materialized through only reading tips and techniques. In the same way, this is different from learning plenty of hints and tips from the instructors.
All in all, while learning though books and from teachers is useful and worthy, I personally advocate more the learning by doing and practicing.