To my memories, with regard

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lonly

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please give me a few of your time ..read and correct.

Hey... hey

Hi .. !

you there .. do you hear me !

did you hear me when I cried last night !

look at me. do you smell my tears? do you like it?

It is just a mix of salt ,water, and pain. don't be shy. you make them, look

at my face.

oooooooh my old friend. It was so long time..

try to remember me ... please just try ... or promise me you will do.

you know what ! I am sure I know you well , I know your body, your silence,

And your whisper, but I want to see your face.

do you have a face? please show me your face...

every night I stand here and wait for you, when the sun come out

I dance with my shade, and try to forget you, but your voice defeat me

and hold my hand , and lead me away across faces , injures ,and crowded

streets to search for a survival dream.

now, I found you , I have no more questions, just tell me who am I?
 

julianna

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Algeria
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please give me a few of your time ..read and correct.

Hey... hey

Hi .. !

You there.. Do you hear me?

Did you hear me when I cried last night?

Look at me. Do you smell my tears? Do you like it?

It is just a mix of salt ,water, and pain. ((Don't be shy)). You caused them..
Look at my face.

Oooooooh my old friend!! It was so long time..

Try to remember me ... Please just try ... Or promise me that you will do so..
You know what! I am sure that I know you well, I know your body, your silence, also your whisper, but I want to see your face.

Do you have a face? please show it to me...

I do every night stand here and wait for you, when the sun comes out

I dance with my shade, and try to forget you, but your voice defeats me, holds my hand and leads me away across faces, injures ,and crowded streets to search for a survival dream.

Now, I found you, I have no more questions, just tell me who am I?
I think I corrected some of your mistakes ..I am not a Teacher
about (( Don't be shy)) I didn't catch what you wanted to say in using it !! this is a Nice poem.. thank you !:up:;-)
 

lonly

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Julianna let me kiss your feet ;You benefit me.

Thanks a lot for your time and your generous.. .



Best wishes

Your pupil Lonly .:cool:
 
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