Who is responsible for Climate change?

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Are humans the main causes of climate change? Support your answer with examples. ( A persuasive essay for practice.)

The climate of earth has been increasing for the past decade. The increasing temperature is not only harmful for the environment but also dangerous for earth and peoples' survival. However, many international societies and groups have been putting their efforts to keep the atmosphere balanced, they are not enough. I believe people are the main cause of pollutions, destroy forests, and natural habitat. Therefore, atmosphere has been changing drastically.

The first cause is rapidly increasing population. Human population is continuously increasing while other species are diminishing from earth. To keep the earth safe and balance, the temperature should be controlled, food web and natural habitat should be preserved. The most important is to leave the space for other creatures to survive.

Next, people's desire have been accelerating with advancement. To fulfill them, people are not only wasting the natural resources but also destroying them. Humans are cutting forests to bulid houses, furnitures, and books. Consequently, Due to lack of forests, ecosystem of earth get disturbed and climate has changed.

Furthermore, manmade factories and industries are also responsible for environmental change. Waste, smoke, and harmful chemicals are not only polluted the surroundings but also infertile earth. Due to industries, air, water, noise, and soil pollution have increased on
a large scale.

In conclusion, Both humans and human made materials are responsible for the change in weather. Moreover, destroying natural habitat and disturbing ecosystem by people have negative impact on climates. So, to save earth and its environment which is necessary for human survival, some serious and important steps should be taken immediately.
 
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Your ideas and overall structure are quite good. However, the text is not well written.
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The climate of earth has been increasing for the past decade. The increasing temperature is not only harmful for the environment but also dangerous for earth and peoples' survival. However, many international societies and groups have been putting their efforts to keep the atmosphere balanced, they are not enough. I believe people are the main cause of pollutions, destroy forests, and natural habitat. Therefore, atmosphere has been changing drastically.


The first cause is rapidly increasing population. Human population is continuously increasing [The start of this paragraph is good, but the rest is off topic. Talk about how more people use more (fossil fuel) energy, etc.][STRIKE] while other species are diminishing from earth. To keep the earth safe and balance, the temperature should be controlled, food web and natural habitat should be preserved. The most important is to leave the space for other creatures to survive.[/STRIKE]


Next, people's desire have been accelerating with advancement. To fulfill them, people are not only wasting the natural resources but also destroying them. Humans are cutting forests to bulid houses, furnitures, and books. Consequently, Due to lack of forests, ecosystem of earth get disturbed and climate has changed. [That's not well thought out. Talk about burning of forests, and large-scale cattle farming as major contributors to greenhouse gas emissions.]


Furthermore, manmade factories and industries are also responsible for environmental change. Waste, smoke, and harmful chemicals are not only polluted the surroundings but also infertile earth. Due to industries, air, water, noise, and soil pollution have increased on
a large scale.

In conclusion, Both humans and human made materials are responsible for the change in weather. Moreover, destroying natural habitat and disturbing ecosystem by people have negative impact on climates. So, to save earth and its environment which is necessary for human survival, some serious and important steps should be taken immediately.
 

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The climate of earth has increased for the past decade. The increasing temperature is not only harmful for the environment but also dangerous for earth and peoples' survival. However, many environmental communities and groups have been putting their efforts to save the earth and climate from being more polluted. I believe people are the main cause of pollutions, destroy forests, and natural habitat which have been changing environment drastically.

The first cause is rapidly increasing population. To fulfill the needs of people, They enhance the burden on earth by cutting forest to use the land for farming and housing. Forests and trees are decreasing which manage the temperature of earth, and the population density is also increasing which rising temperature too. As a result, many forests and living creatures have been vanished from earth which are the important part of nature and foodweb.

Next, people's desire have been accelerating with advancement. To fulfill them, people are not only wasting the natural resources but also destroying them. For example, plastic can not biodegrade which will create problem in future for water, air, and soil resources but, people have been manufacturing and using it. Moreover, some species became rare as people hunted them for their pleasure or food.

Furthermore, factories and industries are also responsible for environmental change. Waste, smoke, and harmful chemicals are not only polluted the surroundings but also barrened the land. Due to industries, air, water, noise, and soil pollution have increased on a large scale.

In conclusion, both humans and human made materials are responsible for the change in climate. Moreover, destroying natural habitat and disturbing ecosystem by people have negative impact on climates. So, to save earth and its environment which is necessary for human survival, some serious and important steps should be taken immediately.
 
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The climate of earth has been changing in recent [STRIKE]increased for the past[/STRIKE] decades. The increasing temperature is not only harmful for the environment, but also dangerous for Earth and peoples' survival. However, many environmental [STRIKE]communities[/STRIKE] organizations and groups have been putting their efforts into saving the earth and our climate from inevitable disaster. [STRIKE]being more polluted.[/STRIKE] I believe people are the main cause of pollution, [STRIKE]destroy[/STRIKE] and the destruction of forests and natural habitats, which [STRIKE]have been changing[/STRIKE] has impacted the environment drastically.

The first factor to consider [STRIKE]cause[/STRIKE] is the world's rapidly increasing population. To fulfill their needs, [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] many people [STRIKE], They enhance the burden on earth by[/STRIKE] have been cutting down forests to use the land for farming and housing. Forests and trees, [STRIKE]are decreasing[/STRIKE] which are very important for regulating [STRIKE]manage[/STRIKE] the Earth's temperature and climate, are, therefore, disappearing at an alarming rate. [STRIKE]of earth, and the population density is also increasing which rising temperature too. As a result, many forests and living creatures have been vanished from earth which are the important part of nature and foodweb. [/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]Next, people's desire have been accelerating with advancement. To fulfill them, people are not only wasting the natural resources but also destroying them. For example, plastic can not biodegrade which will create problem in future for water, air, and soil resources but, people have been manufacturing and using it. Moreover, some species became rare as people hunted them for their pleasure or food. [/STRIKE] [See the comment in my previous post.]

Furthermore, factories and industries are also responsible for environmental change. Waste, smoke, and harmful chemicals are not only polluting [STRIKE]ed[/STRIKE] the environment, [STRIKE]surroundings[/STRIKE] but also contributing directly to the rise in global temperatures. [STRIKE]barrened the land.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]Due to industries, air, water, noise, and soil pollution have increased on a large scale.[/STRIKE] [That's off topic.]

In conclusion, both the rising human population and [STRIKE]human made materials[/STRIKE] the increased industrial activities are responsible for the change in climate. [STRIKE]Moreover,[/STRIKE] More and more people are destroying larger areas of natural habitat and disturbing the ecosystem. [STRIKE]by people have negative impact on climates. So,[/STRIKE] To save earth and its environment which is necessary for human survival, some serious and important steps should be taken immediately. [Be specific in your recommendations.]
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Next, people's desire have been accelerating with advancement. To fulfill them, people are not only wasting the natural resources but also destroying them. For example, plastic can not biodegrade which will create problem in future for water, air, and soil resources but, people have been manufacturing and using it. Moreover, some species became rare as people hunted them for their pleasure or food. [See the comment in my previous post.]

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People have been playing significant role in the emission of greenhouse gases. They use wood, kerosene, coal, and gasoline frequently in their daily chores which release carbon-dioxide and carbon-monoxide in a large quantity. Such gases increasing the climate. Forestfire also releases carbon-dioxide which warms the climate and effectively changes the environment.

 

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Moreover, [STRIKE]People have been playing[/STRIKE] there has been a significant increase [STRIKE]role[/STRIKE] in the emissions of greenhouse gases from the burning of fossil feuls. [STRIKE]They[/STRIKE] People are using enormous amounts of wood, kerosene, coal, and gasoline for heating and various energy requirements, and the burning of such fuels has increased the levels of [STRIKE]frequently in their daily chores which release[/STRIKE] carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. [STRIKE]and carbon-monoxide in a large quantity.[/STRIKE] Such gases increase global temperatures and are a major contributor to climate change. [STRIKE]ing the climate.[/STRIKE] Forest fires also release carbon dioxide, and many forest fires are deliberately lit to clear large tracts for farming and ranching. [STRIKE]which warms the climate and effectively changes the environment.[/STRIKE]
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The climate can neither increase nor decrease.
 
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