[Grammar] Fail to jump over the gate

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seanlim

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Hi there,
Kindly check the grammar and description of the story below.

I and my friend went to our friend’s. One site of the gate has already opened, but my friend intended to jump over the close one and fail.
Me : Hey pal, why you are doing this when the gate has already opened.
Friend : I thought I could make it. Shit…, it’s really hurt. Help me!

Thank you
 

emsr2d2

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Hi there,
Kindly check the grammar and description of the story below.

[strike]I and[/strike] My friend and I went to our friend’s. One [strike]site[/strike] side of the [double] gate [strike]has[/strike] had already been opened (or "was already open"), but my friend [strike]intended[/strike] tried to jump over the closed one and failed.

Me : Hey pal, why [strike]you are doing this[/strike] did you do that when the gate [strike]has[/strike] was already [strike]opened[/strike] open?
Friend : I thought I could make it. Sh*t! [strike]it’s[/strike] That really hurt. Help me!

Thank you.

There is no description of your story. You are just asking us to check the grammar (and the capitalisation, punctuation etc).

Please see my changes above in red.

You need to go back and revise the usage of "open/closed" (adjective) and "to open/to close" (verbs).
 
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