[Grammar] I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

Hi,

Question:
Does my sentence exactly convey the idea I want to say?

Sentence:
I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.

I want to say:
When I studied at the ABC University, I needed to do some IT assignments.
There were both small and large assignments
And the results of those assignments were very good.

Thanks

uktous said:

Hi,

Question:
Does my sentence exactly convey the idea I want to say?

Sentence:
I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.

I want to say:
When I studied at the ABC University, I needed to do some IT assignments.
There were both small and large assignments
And the results of those assignments were very good.

Thanks

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You don't need the comma after "assignments". 2 of your ideas are conveyed perfectly, but the original sentence doesn't show that the assignments you did were a variety of sizes.

Also, depending on which university you're talking about, you may not need "the" before the name. For example:

I obtained good......etc...... when I studied at Oxford University.

I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.

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It's OK. Does this sound better?

When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments.[/QUOTE]

not a teacher

tedtmc said:

It's OK. Does this sound better?

When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments.

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not a teacher[/QUOTE]

someone told me:

"When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments."
This will emphasis the university.

"I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I was studying at ABC University."
This will emphasis the results.

Agree?

No, I don't agree. It almost leaves an implication you got poor results elsewhere.

uktous said:

not a teacher

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someone told me:

"When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments."
This will emphasis(emphasises) the university.

"I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I was studying at ABC University."
This will emphasis the results.

Agree?[/QUOTE]

Not really.
I thought (1) is easier to follow - you tell people about the university you study at, then how you well you did there.

Hi,

How about this?
When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for assignments, especially my IT assignments.

2 benefits:
(1) easier to follow, as tedtmc says.
(2) no implication about poor results elsewhere, as Barb_D says.

Agree?

Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.

Tdol said:

Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.

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I agree. The actual exam results speak for themsellves.

Tdol said:

Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.

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I use the sentence in my job cover letter.
There were more than 1 assignments, so it is too long to mention all of the results.
However, saying "all over 70 marks" may be better.

70 out of how many?

I usually assume out of 100, so that's not a very good mark to me.

uktous said:

I use the sentence in my job cover letter.
There were more than 1 assignments, so it is too long to mention all of the results.
However, saying "all over 70 marks" may be better.

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Why not or 70-xx to give the highest grade too?