Would you mind helping me check out whether these three sentence are correct? Thanks.

jiangyueming · Mar 20, 2012

Would you mind helping me check out whether these three sentence are correct? Thanks.

I appreciate it.

"Internet has provided a great platform. Students can search information on the internet more conveniently. For example, if people want to know the American history, they can just type “the American history” on Google. Results will come up within a second."

Raymott · Mar 20, 2012

jiangyueming said:
Would you mind helping me check out whether these three sentence are correct? Thanks.

I appreciate it.

"The internet has provided a great platform (for what?). Students can search information on the internet more conveniently (than what?). For example, if people want to know [STRIKE]the [/STRIKE]American history, they can just type “[STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] American history” into the Google search engine. Results will come up within a second."

I say "the internet" without a capital and with "the". I don't mind what others use, but be consistent.
Google is more than a search engine these days.

jiangyueming · Mar 20, 2012

What do you mean by "than what"?

Should I add some sentence? Or how to change it? Thanks.

Raymott said:
I say "the internet" without a capital and with "the". I don't mind what others use, but be consistent.
Google is more than a search engine these days.

Raymott · Mar 20, 2012

jiangyueming said:
What do you mean by "than what"?

Should I add some sentence? Or how to change it? Thanks.

"Students can search information on the internet more conveniently

"

Yes, it seems to need clarification. Your sentences don't flow well. You're making a comparison. More conveniently than what?
Here are some possibilities:

"Students can search information on the internet more conveniently than non-students can."
" ... more conveniently than with other platforms."
" ... more

conveniently than through books."

" ... more conveniently than before the internet was invented."
...

Would you mind helping me check out whether these three sentence are correct? Thanks.

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