Glizdka
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Hello,
I'm taking a CAE exam, writing an essay is part of it. I want to practise my writing skills. If one of you, awesome people of this forum, could spare a moment to check my essay, maybe even evaluate it, I would be grateful.
The topic below is an example of the writing task in this exam.
You have attended a Science Club lecture on how schools could encourage young people to train for careers in science. You have made the notes below.
Ways in which schools could encourage young people to train for careers in science
• enjoyable science lessons.
• careers advice.
• guest lectures from professional scientists.
Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
'Kids should be able to design their own experiments.'
'A lot of the careers advice given is already out of date.'
'A lot of the scientists are too busy to spend time visiting schools.'
Write an essay for your tutor, discussing two of the methods in your notes. You should explain which method you think is more important for governments to consider, giving reasons to support your opinion.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed during the discussion but you should use your own words as far as possible.
Write your essay in 220-260 words in an appropriate style.
Science has enabled humans to dominate the world, its importance is not questionable, but "how are we planning to get more students interested in this discipline?" still remains an open question. In this essay, I am going to answer it by discussing two methods of making young people more interested in this subject.
One way of making the young more enthusiastic about science is to aquire a passionate person who could infect them with their attitude. A guest giving occasional lectures about what inspired them to becoming a scientist could be a successful strategy, provided such a person can be found. The latter part of the previous statement is the problem of this strategy, scientists are often busy and cannot find enough time to roam around universities for auxiliary lecutres.
The second approach is simply making the syllabus more enjoyable. Young people are energetic and want to be involved. Allowing students to personalize what they are to work on is a great way of making them engaged, especially when we consider the fact that every person is different. This, however, would be extremely difficult to evaluate, and consistency of the program the university uses would be endangered.
In my opinion, the method I suggested in the second paragraph of this essay is more risky. Simply choosing a wrong person to give lectures could ruin the view on science young people will develop. Giving students more freedom of choice in what they learn is more preferrable and I am certain it would prove to be effective.
I'm taking a CAE exam, writing an essay is part of it. I want to practise my writing skills. If one of you, awesome people of this forum, could spare a moment to check my essay, maybe even evaluate it, I would be grateful.
The topic below is an example of the writing task in this exam.
You have attended a Science Club lecture on how schools could encourage young people to train for careers in science. You have made the notes below.
Ways in which schools could encourage young people to train for careers in science
• enjoyable science lessons.
• careers advice.
• guest lectures from professional scientists.
Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
'Kids should be able to design their own experiments.'
'A lot of the careers advice given is already out of date.'
'A lot of the scientists are too busy to spend time visiting schools.'
Write an essay for your tutor, discussing two of the methods in your notes. You should explain which method you think is more important for governments to consider, giving reasons to support your opinion.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed during the discussion but you should use your own words as far as possible.
Write your essay in 220-260 words in an appropriate style.
Science has enabled humans to dominate the world, its importance is not questionable, but "how are we planning to get more students interested in this discipline?" still remains an open question. In this essay, I am going to answer it by discussing two methods of making young people more interested in this subject.
One way of making the young more enthusiastic about science is to aquire a passionate person who could infect them with their attitude. A guest giving occasional lectures about what inspired them to becoming a scientist could be a successful strategy, provided such a person can be found. The latter part of the previous statement is the problem of this strategy, scientists are often busy and cannot find enough time to roam around universities for auxiliary lecutres.
The second approach is simply making the syllabus more enjoyable. Young people are energetic and want to be involved. Allowing students to personalize what they are to work on is a great way of making them engaged, especially when we consider the fact that every person is different. This, however, would be extremely difficult to evaluate, and consistency of the program the university uses would be endangered.
In my opinion, the method I suggested in the second paragraph of this essay is more risky. Simply choosing a wrong person to give lectures could ruin the view on science young people will develop. Giving students more freedom of choice in what they learn is more preferrable and I am certain it would prove to be effective.
| Total Word Count: | 255 |
| Total Unique Words: | 146 |
| Number of Sentences: | 13 |
| Average Sentence Length: | 19.6 |
| Number of Paragraphs: | 4 |
| Hard Words: | (16.86%) (what's this?) |
| Lexical Density: | 57.25 (what's this?) |
| Fog Index: | 14.59 (what's this?) |
