[Grammar] I need help to correct my grammar. Thanks in advance

arrish4 · Mar 15, 2016

"Hi, farah, did you know 2 week ago i said "i want to tell you something" and i didn't tell you and last week also i said again "i want to tell you something" but i didn't but now i decided tell you."

"Did you know when we had a conversation everyday especially when we chat from 10pm-1am my friends always text me on that time but i didn't reply their text while i was texting u. I never makes my "WhatsApp" status offline because you're in my priority list, I gave you so much importance but i shouldn't just because of you i lose 2 of my friends but it's my fault too because i put you in my priority list. Thanks for everything farah. Bye"

Can anyone to help me edit this ? thank you

emsr2d2 · Mar 15, 2016

arrish4 said:
"Hi, farah, did you know 2 week ago i said "i want to tell you something" and i didn't tell you..and last week also i said again "i want to tell you something" but i didn't..but now i decided tell you.."

"Did you know when we had a conversation everyday especially when we chat from 10pm-1am..my friends always text me on that time but i didn't reply their text while i was texting u..i never makes my "WhatsApp" status offline because you're in my priority list..I gave you so much importance but i shouldn't..just because of you i lose 2 of my friends..but it's my fault too..because i put you in my priority list. Thanks for everything farah. Bye"

Is my sentence correct? Please help thank you in advance

Which single sentence are you referring to?

Please note that we don't connect sentences with strings of dots as you have done.

arrish4 · Mar 15, 2016

emsr2d2 said:
Which single sentence are you referring to?

Please note that we don't connect sentences with strings of dots as you have done.

I just re-edit my post! Just to Correct some mistakes. Can you help me to edit this. Thank you

Barb_D · Mar 15, 2016

1. You need to separate these into multiple sentences.
2. You need to capitalize her name.
3. You need to capitalize the pronoun "I"
4. Ask "Do you remember" not "Did you know" and end that sentence with a question mark.
5. Now I've decided (not "i decided")
6. There is no word "u." The word is "you."
7. I've lost (not "i lose")
8. What are they entire things in quotation marks?

You have some nerve saying it's her fault in any way. YOU chose to ignore your friends - she didn't make you. It's not "your fault too" - it's YOUR fault.

Make those corrections in a new post below and then we will look again.

arrish4 · Mar 15, 2016

Hi, Farah, did you know 2 week ago I said "I want to tell you something" and I didn't tell you..and last week also I said again "I want to tell you something" but I didn't..but now I've decided tell you..

Do you remember? When we had a conversation everyday especially when we chat from 10pm-1am my friends always text me but I didn't reply their text while I was texting you I never makes my "WhatsApp" status offline because you're in my priority list. I gave you so much importance but I shouldn't just because of you I've lost 2 of my friends but it's MY fault because I put you in my priority list. Thanks for everything Farah. Bye.

Re-edit. Please help me to edit this. Thanks

arrish4 · Mar 15, 2016

Barb_D said:
1. You need to separate these into multiple sentences.
2. You need to capitalize her name.
3. You need to capitalize the pronoun "I"
4. Ask "Do you remember" not "Did you know" and end that sentence with a question mark.
5. Now I've decided (not "i decided")
6. There is no word "u." The word is "you."
7. I've lost (not "i lose")
8. What are they entire things in quotation marks?

You have some nerve saying it's her fault in any way. YOU chose to ignore your friends - she didn't make you. It's not "your fault too" - it's YOUR fault.

Make those corrections in a new post below and then we will look again.

Done!

emsr2d2 · Mar 15, 2016

When Barb said you need to capitalise the name, she was referring only to the first letter. It should be "Farah".

arrish4 · Mar 15, 2016

emsr2d2 said:
When Barb said you need to capitalise the name, she was referring only to the first letter. It should be "Farah".

Ok. Done. Is my words ok?

Tarheel · Mar 15, 2016

Say:

Hi Farah! Do you remember that two weeks ago I said I wanted to tell you something, but I didn't tell you?

emsr2d2 · Mar 15, 2016

arrish4 said:
[STRIKE]Ok[/STRIKE] OK. Done. [STRIKE]Is[/STRIKE] Are my words [STRIKE]ok[/STRIKE] OK?

1. You used "words" so you need the third person plural verb "Are".
2. We write either "OK" or "okay" but never "ok" or "Ok".

Tarheel · Mar 15, 2016

Say:

And do you remember that last week again I said, "I want to tell you something" but I didn't tell you?

Tarheel · Mar 15, 2016

Say:

Now I've decided to tell you.

emsr2d2 · Mar 15, 2016

arrish4 said:
Hi, Farah, [STRIKE]did you know[/STRIKE] do you remember that [STRIKE]2[/STRIKE] two weeks ago I said "I want to tell you something" and then I didn't tell you? [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] Last week, [STRIKE]also[/STRIKE] I said again "I want to tell you something" but I didn't tell you. [STRIKE]but[/STRIKE] Well, now I've decided tell you.

Do you remember? When we had a conversation [STRIKE]everyday[/STRIKE] every day, especially when we chatted from 10pm-1am, my friends [STRIKE]always[/STRIKE] frequently texted me but I didn't reply to their texts while I was texting you. I [STRIKE]never[/STRIKE] didn't [STRIKE]makes[/STRIKE] make my "WhatsApp" status "offline" because you're in my priority list. I [STRIKE]gave[/STRIKE] made/considered you [STRIKE]so much[/STRIKE] very [STRIKE]importance[/STRIKE] important but I shouldn't have. [STRIKE]just[/STRIKE] Because of you, I've lost [STRIKE]2[/STRIKE] two of my friends but it's MY fault because I put you in my priority list. Thanks for everything, Farah. Bye.

[STRIKE]Re-edit.[/STRIKE] Please help me to edit this. Thanks.

See above for my corrections. I assume you don't want to remain friends with Farah.

Tarheel · Mar 15, 2016

Say:

We used to text each other every day from 10PM to 1AM.

arrish4 · Mar 16, 2016

Thank you so much for your corporate everyone. Appreciate it

tedmc · Mar 16, 2016

Thank you so much for your [STRIKE]corporate[/STRIKE] help everyone. I appreciate it

I don't think it is appropriate to use "cooperation".

You should have used the "thank" button instead of posting again.

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