Effect of bleeding in the movie "Harry Potter"

Sentence: Effect of bleeding in the movie "Harry Potter " develop improperly.

I want to tell that effect of bleeding in this movie , with every minute is worst.

I have changed your thread title. Titles like "Please check" or "Look at this sentence" are no use. Each thread title should include some/all of the words/phrases you are querying.

I don't understand your question, again, unfortunately. Are you talking about the amount of blood that can be seen in the Harry Potter films?

No, don't look at movie title, because it is an example.

For example:
Minutes:
10:00 - bleeding effect is ok.
11:00- bleeding effect is worst
12:00- bleeding effect is the worst

So i want to tell that in every minute it become worst,
But i can't tell it become worst,
I have to tell develop/expand,
Or something like:


or
I hit him and in every minute effect of bleeding develop correctly

because if I:

I hit him and in every minute effect of bleeding develop improperly.
It would be wrong, because if I hit him he sould bleed more, but imagine that is magic and in every minute, effect of bleeding develop/expand improperly (like i hit him, and he bleed less, istead of more.

I'm looking forward to your examples of sentences, maybe i will choose something

What do you mean by "develops improperly"?

Please edit your post so that it contains full sentences, and ensure that every sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with an appropriate punctuation mark.

Ok, I did it.

vogelvogelvogel3 said:

OK, I did it.

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You partly did it. There are still some incomplete sentences.

Unfortunately, I still don't know what you are trying to say.:-(

I don't know, how you can't know what I mean.
So I will describe every word:

Bleeding - blood , do bleeding
in the Harry Potter movie - bleedings in this movie
improve - because, imagine , bleeding is smaller and we improve it and it is bigger.
not correctly/noproperly

It can't be says in easier words ...

Bleeding in this movie improve not correctly.

Don't think that doesn't suit to a movie or something
I just need a sentence which is correct by gramma etc.

Bleeding in .... improve not correctly

vogelvogelvogel3 said:

I don't know, how you can't know what I mean.
So I will describe every word:

Bleeding - blood , do bleeding
in the Harry Potter movie - bleedings in this movie
improve - because, imagine , bleeding is smaller and we improve it and it is bigger.
not correctly/noproperly

It can't be says in easier words ...

Bleeding in this movie improve not correctly.

Don't think that doesn't suit to a movie or something
I just need a sentence which is correct by gramma etc.

Bleeding in .... improve not correctly

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We can't understand your English. Do you have a friend who is fluent in English and in your language? If you do, you can ask him or her to help write your question.

But tell me, which part you don't understand, maybe I will can to say it in diffrent words

vogelvogelvogel3 said:

But tell me, which part you don't understand, maybe I will can to say it in diffrent words

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I understood this post, but almost none of your previous ones.

Here's a corrected version: But tell me which part you don't understand. Maybe I can say it in different words.

"I want to tell that effect of bleeding in this movie , with every minute is worst."

It's normal for the effect of bleeding to get worse. If you keep bleeding,you eventually exsanguinate and die. (I know you don't mean this, but it gives you some extra words that you seem to desperately need.)
Maybe Piscean is right in his assumption. The bleeding should decrease, but the effect of the bleeding on the bleeding person needn't decrease.

vogel, I think that you are trying to make sentences which are too complicated/difficult for your level of English. Your English seems to be very basic. Are you a beginner? You need to learn how to write basic sentences correctly before you try to write long, difficult sentences.

Piscean said:

It's normal for the effect of bleeding to get worse.

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Yes it is obvious that effect of bleeding get to worse,

But i want to create an opposite sentence.

Maybe think like that:

There is a knife, and with every using it, i hurt myself, and here, it is ofcourse that: I'm using it, I hurt myself, and I'm bleeding, with every minute I'm bleeding more, but try to imagine that this is magic, and with every use instead of more bleeding i less bleeding.

You think more realistic, but you shouldn't.

This sentence would be use for science-fiction newspaper.

What part of my sentence is uncorrect ?

vogelvogelvogel3 said:

Yes it is obvious that effect of bleeding get to worse,

But i want to create an opposite sentence.

Maybe think like that:

There is a knife, and with every using it, i hurt myself, and here, it is ofcourse that: I'm using it, I hurt myself, and I'm bleeding, with every minute I'm bleeding more, but try to imagine that this is magic, and with every use instead of more bleeding i less bleeding.

You think more realistic, but you shouldn't.

This sentence would be use for science-fiction newspaper.

What part of my sentence is uncorrect ?

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Try expressing your idea with at least six short sentences. Each sentence has to have a main verb and end with a period, question mark, or exclamation mark.

vogelvogelvogel3 said:

Yes, it is obvious that the effect of the bleeding gets [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] worse (no comma here) but I want to create [STRIKE]an opposite[/STRIKE] a sentence which has the opposite idea.

Maybe think about it like [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] this:

There is a knife (no comma here) and [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] every time I [STRIKE]using[/STRIKE] use it, I hurt myself. [STRIKE]and here, it is[/STRIKE] In this situation, of course, [STRIKE]that:[/STRIKE] I'm using it, I hurt myself, and I'm bleeding - with every minute I'm bleeding more, but try to imagine that this is magic (no comma here) and, with every use, instead of [STRIKE]more[/STRIKE] bleeding more, I bleed less. [STRIKE]bleeding.[/STRIKE]

You are thinking about this as a [STRIKE]more[/STRIKE] realistic situation, but you shouldn't.

This sentence would be used for a science-fiction [STRIKE]newspaper[/STRIKE] story/book/magazine/film.

What part of my sentence is incorrect?

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Please see my multiple corrections above. The number of corrections might give you an idea why we are having so much trouble understanding what you are talking about.

It is important to follow these rules of written English at all times:

- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with a single, appropriate punctuation mark.
- Always capitalise the word "I".
- Do not put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.

As I said before, you are trying to construct complicated sentences but your English level is not good enough to do that yet.

The best I can do with your main idea is something like "In real life, if you keep stabbing yourself with a knife, the bleeding will get worse. In the magical world [of Harry Potter], if you keep stabbing yourself, you bleed less!" Honestly, I don't really know if that's what you're trying to say.

emsr2d2 is correct. The idea that you are trying to express is just too complicated for your English level. If you can't convey the idea clearly by the end of page two, then you may want to reconsider who should do the writing for this newspaper article.

I don't know how you can't understand that :shock:

So maybe another example:

You propably know that cars have engines. Engines have power which is determined by "HP". And in this sentence I want to tell that, if i add HP to this engine this car drive slowly instead of faster, so there is something wrong with it.

So:

Speed of the BMW car develops inproperly with every added HP, starting from 100HP.

Well, I tried and I did my best with the baffling information I was given.

You have to stop using the phrase "develops improperly". It means nothing. Look up "improper/improperly" in a good dictionary.

On that note, I'm going to politely excuse myself from this thread for the sake of my blood pressure.