[Grammar] Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

Nikitus · Aug 27, 2016

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl's eyes. Mark runs away from the living. while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."

Thanks.

Rover_KE · Aug 27, 2016

Source and author?

Nikitus · Aug 27, 2016

Dear Rover KE

I am the author of the text. But I am aware that it have a lot of mistakes due that english is not my native language.

Thanks.

Rover_KE · Aug 27, 2016

The Similar Threads below show that 'incandescent light' is best avoided.

teechar · Aug 27, 2016

Nikitus said:
Mark runs away from the living, while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."

"The living" means the living people (those not dead).
Is that what you intend?

Also, it's a bit unclear who you intend "he" to refer to.
Finally, why are there quotes around "Athena?"

emsr2d2 · Aug 27, 2016

Nikitus said:
Dear Rover KE

I am the author of the text (no full stop here) but I am aware that it [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] has/contains a lot of mistakes due to the fact that English is not my native language.

Thanks.

Note my corrections above.

emsr2d2 · Aug 27, 2016

Nikitus said:
Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl's eyes. Mark runs away from the living. while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."

Thanks.

I would just use "light" or "bright light". What do you mean by "Mark runs away from the living"? Remove the comma after the first "living". What do you mean by "he goes back to the living"?

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