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rayan_engg

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One of the divorce victims is children. Children from divorce families have academic problems. They are more likely to be aggressive and get troubles with school authorities and the police. They are more likely to have depressed because they have loneliness feelings for the loss of other parent. Also in teenage, they are more likely to engage in delinquent activities, to get involved in early sexual activity, get illegal drugs and so on. As result, the family construction is very important to child. So the divorce decision threats the child security, self-worth and so on.
please..i need your support for correction..thank you,
 

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[STRIKE]One of the divorce victims is children[/STRIKE]. Children are often the main victims of divorce. Children from [STRIKE]divorce families[/STRIKE] broken homes have academic problems. They are more likely to be aggressive and get [STRIKE]into[/STRIKE] trouble with school authorities and the police. They are more likely to [STRIKE]have depressed[/STRIKE] suffer from depression because they [STRIKE]have loneliness feelings[/STRIKE]feel lonely [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] due to the loss of [STRIKE]other [/STRIKE] one parent. Also, [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] as teenagers, they are more likely to engage in delinquent activities, [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] get involved in early sexual activity, [STRIKE]get[/STRIKE] take illegal drugs and so on. As a result, [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] family [STRIKE]construction[/STRIKE] is very important to children. [STRIKE]So[/STRIKE] The [STRIKE]divorce[/STRIKE] decision to divorce threatens the child's security, self-worth and so on.

[STRIKE]Please..[/STRIKE] I need your [STRIKE]support[/STRIKE] help [STRIKE]for [/STRIKE] to correct[STRIKE]ion[/STRIKE] this. Thank you.

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Please be careful with your use of full stops. In the final paragraph "Please, I need your support" you used ".." twice. You only need one full stop, then a space. Remember to capitalise the first word of every sentence at all times.

Note: "broken home" is a phrase used in BrE to explain that the parents are no longer together, due to separation or divorce.
 
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