She locked the insatiable naughty girl inside her for many years

alpacinoutd said:

Is this correct? Can I improve it stylistically?

She locked the insatiable naughty girl inside her for many years and stayed loyal to her husband. Patrick changed everything. He gave her so much pleasure and unleashed her suppressed desires. A Pandora's box had been opened. Jane opened the [FONT=-apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, segoe ui, Roboto, helvetica neue, Arial, noto sans, sans-serif, apple color emoji, segoe ui emoji, segoe ui symbol, noto color emoji]box[/FONT] and let that pleasure-seeking girl [STRIKE]inside her[/STRIKE] out.

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Charlie Bernstein said:

You had a mixed metaphor. I unmixed it.

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