[Essay] CAE: report

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Hello, guys! Please, check my report for CAE exam!

Numbers of foreign students attending a language school in your town have been falling recently and a governors’ committee has been established to increase future numbers.The school principal has asked you to write a report for this committee on the current situation and to recommend how more students could be attracted to the school. Your report should address the following:t what attracts foreigners to your town new teaching methods and facilities that could be offered how leisure facilities and opportunities for socialising could be improved. Write your (missing word) in 220-260 words

Introduction
The principal objective of my report is to highlight the current situation at our language school and make some suggestions for the improvements related to the attractiveness of our town, modern teaching methods, and leisure activities. My report is based on numerous comments I have got from international students and my own observations.

Town issue
To boost the attractiveness of the town, the governor committee should pay extra attention to cultural establishments, as a lack of such is what international students most complain about. Local libraries, the theatre, and the cinema are dilapidated which evokes little intention to go there. All of the buildings require renovation.

Teaching progress
Our language school applies a conventional teaching strategy that focuses on communication between teachers and students only at school. None of the teachers use modern technology and the Internet in their educational programs, whereas applying them might be beneficial, as it would provide constant communication between teachers and students, and allow them to give feedback on the syllabus.

Leisure facilities
According to the international students, who used to study in our town, a lack of nightlife was the major drawback during their educational process. Instead of going out, they had to stay in dormitories which most of them found tedious. We still do not have any nightclubs, bars, and karaoke clubs, so establishing ones would contribute to the attractiveness of the town.

Recommendations
I would recommend implementing all the suggestions listed above with special attention to the nightlife issue. First nightclubs and bars will not only boost the attractiveness of our town, but will also be welcomed by local young people.
 
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Welcome to the forum. :hi:

1. Please note that by pasting text, you have lost several spaces. I have marked the relevant areas (and a couple of other errors) in red in post #1. Click on Edit Post and rectify those errors (change the text back to black too), then click Save.
2. Is the actual essay you will submit for your exam?
 

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Welcome to the forum. :hi:

1. Please note that by pasting text, you have lost several spaces. I have marked the relevant areas (and a couple of other errors) in red in post #1. Click on Edit Post and rectify those errors (change the text back to black too), then click Save.
2. Is the actual essay you will submit for your exam?

Hello! :) I'm sorry I can't find the button "Edit Post":cry: :(((

No, I'm just starting my preparations for this exam and I want someone (someone more qualified) to check it :)
 

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[STRIKE]Hello! :)[/STRIKE] I'm sorry I can't find the button "Edit Post". :cry: [STRIKE]:((([/STRIKE] That's because you have been timed out. You only have 24 hours to use this function. I'll do it for you this time.

No, I'm just starting my preparations for this exam and I want someone more qualified to check it. [STRIKE]:)[/STRIKE]
Please stop using home-made emoticons, and don't use emoticons to replace standard punctuation marks.
 

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Introduction
The principal objective of my report is to highlight the current situation at our language school and make some suggestions for the improvements [STRIKE]related [/STRIKE] to the attractiveness of our town,[STRIKE] modern[/STRIKE] teaching methods, and leisure activities (with a view to attracting more students to the school). My report is based on numerous comments I have [STRIKE]got[/STRIKE] received from international students and my own observations.

Town issue
To boost the attractiveness of the town, the governor committee (board of governors/management committee?) should pay extra attention to (look into promoting the setting up of) cultural establishments, as a lack of such amenities is what international students [STRIKE]most[/STRIKE] complain about most. The existing local libraries, the theatre, and the cinema are dilapidated [STRIKE]which evokes little intention to go there[/STRIKE] and are unattractive to visit. All of the buildings require renovation.

Teaching progress
Our language school [STRIKE]applies[/STRIKE] follows/adopts a conventional teaching strategy that focuses on communication between teachers and students only at school. None of the teachers use modern technology and the internet in their educational programs. [STRIKE]whereas applying[/STRIKE] Adopting them [STRIKE]might[/STRIKE] would be beneficial, as it would provide [STRIKE]constant[/STRIKE] a direct line of communication between teachers and students, and allow them to give feedback on the syllabus (program).

Leisure facilities
According to the international students who used to study in our town, a lack of nightlife was the major drawback during their [STRIKE]educational process[/STRIKE] school career. [STRIKE]Instead of going out[/STRIKE] Without facilities for socialising/entertainment, they had to stay in dormitories most of the time, which most of them found [STRIKE]tedious[/STRIKE] monotonous. We still do not have any nightclubs, bars, and karaoke clubs, so [STRIKE]establishing ones[/STRIKE] having such establishments would [STRIKE]contribute to the attractiveness of[/STRIKE] make the town more vibrant.

Recommendations
I would recommend implementing all the suggestions [STRIKE]listed [/STRIKE]above with special attention to be given to the nightlife issue. [STRIKE]First[/STRIKE] Nightclubs and bars will not only boost the attractiveness of our town, but will also be welcomed by local young people.

In my opinion, the establishment of nightspots like bars and nightclubs are commercial decisions by the business community of the town, which the school have little influence over, though they can help encourage such business activities. Secondly, there may be a conflict in having a vibrant nightlife, potentially a distraction, and providing a conducive environment for students to study.

 
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