Translated from french, text for a video

Hello everyone.
First of all, thanks for your time.
I recently made a short video containing some text in french language.
I would like this video to be available to the non french speakers, so I tried to translate it in english.
Here is what I've done, could you review it and correct what is wrong ?

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You could have done
so many things.
Is it too late, already ?
Only you can tell.


"The first step is always the hardest"
Why not start with the second one ?
A nice trick, for sure !
Alas, quite the false move.
I would stop, and turn back, if not for my pride.
Drifting farther, I now face the consequences
With the dreadful feeling I've forgotten the gist
Why should I even go on ?


Had I taken a little step back,
I would have realised these limits were here
solely because I wished they were.


I crafted many pieces,
but they never belonged to the same puzzle.
How to get the full picture, then ?


I don't bother denying it anymore :
I lack something.
I won't seek the answer in other people's work,
lest I should find !
Then I could only concede
How wrong I was.
The irony...
I only wish to move on !


Where to go, where's the guiding theme ?
How can I deliver a message...
When I'm unaware of its content ?
Nobody ever gave me direction...
Did they ?
If so, I wasn't listening.


Suddenly, the solution appears :
Stop, and take stock.
A break is never a loss of time.
I needed insight, to get back to reality.


How am I supposed to shine ?
When there are already too many stars ?


Finally, the harshest critic...
was it me ?

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Please, correct.
Thank you !

Richard Braintree said:

Alas, quite the false move.

With the dreadful feeling I've forgotten the gist

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Whatever about the rest of it, the above lines certainly don't work for me.

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Richard Braintree said:

lest I should find it!
A break is never a [STRIKE]loss[/STRIKE] waste of time.

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Thanks, Teechar.

I was not sure how to use "gist".
I reckon it's the kind of word I hardly see.

The text might sound strange. It's because it is strange in french, too.
But I simply don't want to upload a video with completely incorrect sentences, or grammar.

From what you've read, and putting aside the fact that some sentences have a limited meaning, do you think the rest is grammatically correct ?

Again, thanks for your time.

Richard Braintree said:

From what you've read, and putting aside the fact that some sentences have a limited meaning, do you think the rest is grammatically correct ?

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Yes, it's okay to use as the audio commentary for an online video.

Richard Braintree said:

Hello everyone.
First of all, thanks for your time.
I recently made a short video containing some text in French. [STRIKE]language.[/STRIKE] I would like this video to be available to [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] non-French speakers (no comma required here) so I tried to translate it into English.
Here is what I've done. Could you review it and correct what is wrong?

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Please (no comma here) correct it.
Thank you!

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Note my corrections to the parts of your post which aren't the translation. Remember to capitalise proper nouns and that there is no need for a space before a closing punctuation mark.

emsr2d2, I had no idea that the rules for spacing were not the same in English and in French.
I will remember this.
Thanks again!