prof read a letter

greenhouse said:

Would it be possible for someone on the forum to proofread my letter? I need to write many letters like the following letter at my work. Please advise how [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] I can improve my letter/memo-writing style as it is one of my regular tasks. Thanks. [STRIKE]HANKS[/STRIKE]

Dear "A",

We are pleased to inform you that your application for part-time graduate study at [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] the Department of Computer Science [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] in the University of DU has been accepted.

Please, go to the graduate studies website "www.graduatestudiesdu.org" to activate your student account. Once you enter your temporary personal access code XXXX (PAC), it will prompt [STRIKE]promote[/STRIKE] you to create your own password. Please note, it will take about 24 hours for your password to get activated in the system.

As soon as your student account gets activated, you will be able to register for your desired courses for summer 2017, on our website.

Please contact us if you have any questions or concerns.

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greenhouse said:

Yes, it is "proofread." Sorry for the careless mistakes, and thank you emsr2d2 and teechar for your help.

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