[Essay] History- 'The New Deal'

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I have to answer a question on The New Deal (USA) for a History essay, and i would like some help as im kind of stuck on a part.

In the middle of my essay i've started to write this:

Also, Eleanor Roosevelt became an important campaigner on social issues. This is imprtant as it allowed women to become ambitious. They earned alot if money which helped for them to start living the Americandream by themselves as they could now become more independent than before.
 

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I have to answer a question on The New Deal (USA) for a history essay, and I would like some help as I'm kind of stuck on a part.

In the middle of my essay I've started to write this:

Also, Eleanor Roosevelt became an important campaigner on social issues. This [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] was important as it allowed women to become ambitious. They could earn[STRIKE]ed[/STRIKE] a lot [STRIKE]if[/STRIKE] of money which helped [STRIKE]for [/STRIKE] them to start living the American dream more independently [STRIKE]by themselves as they could now become more independent than before[/STRIKE].

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