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    Is the clause correctly phrased?

    I was very happy when I was reunited with my parents whom I had lost contact since I was a child. My heart was very much vibrated and my tears flowed naturally.

    Is the clause in bold correctly phrased?

    I feel it would be better if it reads: "I could feel vibrations in my heart." However, I wonder whether this is what a native speaker would say.

    Another version I can think of is "I could feel my heart beat very fast."

    I look forward to comments on my query.

    Many thanks indeed.

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    #2

    Re: Is the clause correctly phrased?

    Your emboldened phrase is a bit awkward, your option would be a better choice. You might also consider "My heart palpitated as tears ran down my face."

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    #3

    Re: Is the clause correctly phrased?

    ...Or, perhaps more naturally still, 'My heart was pounding...'.

    There is, incidentally, an error in your first sentence:

    --> ...my parents, with whom whom I had lost contact...

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    Re: Is the clause correctly phrased?

    Quote Originally Posted by Lady Hawk View Post
    Your emboldened phrase is a bit awkward, your option would be a better choice. You might also consider "My heart palpitated as tears ran down my face."
    My heart was very much vibrated and my tears flowed naturally.

    1. "I could feel vibrations in my heart."

    2. "I could feel my heart beat very fast."

    Is #1 what a native speaker would say instead of the clause in bold?

    Many thanks.

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    Re: Is the clause correctly phrased?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    My heart was very much vibrated and my tears flowed naturally.

    1. "I could feel vibrations in my heart."

    2. "I could feel my heart beat very fast."

    Is #1 what a native speaker would say instead of the clause in bold?

    Many thanks.
    Personally, if I felt my heart vibrating or palpitating, I would go to a doctor! I think someone else already suggested it, but I think "my heart was pounding (in my chest)" works better. It can suggest excitement, fear, happiness.

    I also don't particularly like "my tears flowed NATURALLY". Tears are a natural bodily function, so the word isn't really necessary. "My tears flowed freely" sounds better to me.

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