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    Is this correct?does it have any gramaticly problem?

    It's a story about some people who lost in the snowstorm. Both their horses and they were exhausted. They tried to make themselves warm but they had no match. According to stories they read before, they tried to build a fire in Indian way (in the method of) by their hunting rifle or rubbing dry sticks together. They made a pile of twigs .It lasted 10 or 15 min. the snow fall faster and they looked like a statues. Their leader aimed his riffle, pulled the trigger and sent them away but their experiment was useless. In that time they had known their horses were gone. Despite duty of the leader to hold them he had released them. It was useful to try to follow them because they could never see even near distance. They didn't want to give up hope, so another time they tried to set a fire by rubbing sticks. At the end of the half an hour they were bit warmer from their activities but the sticks were as cold as ever. They were hopeless, they were quiet and the wind became also quiet .there were no noise just the noise of falling snow. They held each other Said goodbye and waiting for drowsiness that often comes before death by freezing. They didn't know how long they were in this situation but it seemed an age. Alertness begin to understand happening and with alertness the pain also come they thought" this is death, they are no longer alive". Nevertheless, the leader stood up and in the gray dawn he understood, they were 15 paces away from a building. They didn't add any word to this adventure .They were hopeless and miserable right in front of a comfortable place.

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    Exclamation Re: Is this correct?does it have any gramaticly problem?

    Quote Originally Posted by sanioli View Post
    It's It's a story about some people who got lost in the snowstorm. Both their horses and they themslves were exhausted. They tried as to how to keep (make) themselves warm but they had no match box. According to an idea (stories) they had (read) before, they tried to ignite (build) a fire in the primitive Indian way (in the method of) by using their hunting rifle or rubbing dry sticks together. They made a pile of twigs which.(It) lasted 10 or 15 min while the snow was fall faster and they looked dumbfounded (like a statues). Their leader aimed his riffle, pulled the trigger and wanted to send the horses ( them) away but their experiment was useless, as by (In) that time they knew (had known) their horses were gone. Despite his responsibility (duty of ) to hold them the leader (he) had released them. It was not of any use (useful) to try to follow them because they could never see even the nearest distance. They didn't want to give up hope, so after some (another) time they tried to set a fire by rubbing sticks. (At the end of) For the next half an hour they were a bit warmer by (from) their efforts (activities) but the sticks were as cold as ever. They were hopeless, remained (they were) quiet and the wind also became quiet. (there were) No noise was heard except (just the noise) the falling of snow. They held each other to say (Said) goodbye and waited (ing) for drowsiness that often comes before death by freezing. They didn't know how long they were in this situation but it seemed to be an age. Alertness began (in) to signal (understand) happening and with alertness the pain also came, they thought" this is death, they are no longer alive". Nevertheless, the leader stood up and in the gray dawn he understood, they were 15 paces away from a building. They didn't utter (add) any word to this misadventure .They were hopeless and miserable right in front of a comfortable place.
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