Results 1 to 3 of 3
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Russian
      • Home Country:
      • Russian Federation
      • Current Location:
      • Russian Federation

    • Join Date: Oct 2007
    • Posts: 732
    #1

    grammar of a sentence

    Hello everyone,

    I'd like to ask if the second sentence in the following passage is written correctly:

    Complicated deformations of the post-Soviet origin are, of course, also can be found, although as an exception only. At the same time, in the absence of proper reforms, a steady growth of their number can be forecasted explained by both political factors because of which they are not politically neutral a priori and by gross errors in the institutional-legal planning during the transition from the Soviet legal system to the systems of the western model.

    I'm not sure about the following:
    1. Is it clear to native speakers that "explained" refers to "growth", i.e. the growth is/can be explained based on the political factors and on gross errors in institutional-legal planning.

    2. Is "because of which" used correctly? The intended meaning is: These deformations are not politically neutral because of political factors.

    3. And do I need a comma between forecasted and explained?
    Last edited by KLPNO; 02-Sep-2009 at 13:57.

  1. bhaisahab's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • England
      • Current Location:
      • Ireland

    • Join Date: Apr 2008
    • Posts: 25,627
    #2

    Re: grammar of a sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by KLPNO View Post
    Hello everyone,

    I'd like to ask if the second sentence in the following passage is written correctly:

    Complicated deformations of the post-Soviet origin are, of course, also can be found, although as an exception only. At the same time, in the absence of proper reforms, a steady growth of their number can be forecasted explained by both political factors because of which they are not politically neutral a priori and by gross errors in the institutional-legal planning during the transition from the Soviet legal system to the systems of the western model.

    I'm not sure about the following:
    1. Is it clear to native speakers that "explained" refers to "growth", i.e. the growth is/can be explained based on the political factors and on gross errors in institutional-legal planning.

    2. Is "because of which" used correctly? The intended meaning is: These deformations are not politically neutral because of political factors.

    3. And do I need a comma between forecasted and explained?
    Complicated deformations of the post-Soviet origin are, of course, also can be found, although as an exception only. At the same time, in the absence of proper reforms, a steady growth of their number can be forecasted explained by both political factors because of which they are not politically neutral a priori and by gross errors in the institutional-legal planning during the transition from the Soviet legal system to the systems of the western model.

    There are a lot of problems with this text I have highlighted some in red but really the whole thing needs to be rewritten.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Russian
      • Home Country:
      • Russian Federation
      • Current Location:
      • Russian Federation

    • Join Date: Oct 2007
    • Posts: 732
    #3

    Re: grammar of a sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by bhaisahab View Post
    Complicated deformations of the post-Soviet origin are, of course, also can be found, although as an exception only. At the same time, in the absence of proper reforms, a steady growth of their number can be forecasted explained by both political factors because of which they are not politically neutral a priori and by gross errors in the institutional-legal planning during the transition from the Soviet legal system to the systems of the western model.

    There are a lot of problems with this text I have highlighted some in red but really the whole thing needs to be rewritten.
    Thank you very much, bhaisahab! I was rephrasing the text several times before posting and I forgot to correct some things: of course also can be found (I removed "are");
    a steady growth of their numbers.

Similar Threads

  1. Is there a grammar of spoken English?
    By M56 in forum General Language Discussions
    Replies: 25
    Last Post: 09-Feb-2009, 01:58
  2. is this sentence o.k. in terms of grammar
    By samantha_dear3 in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 13-Jul-2008, 04:12
  3. Grammar. Which sentence is correct
    By Unregistered in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 19-Jun-2008, 23:21
  4. Is the grammar of this sentence correct?
    By albertage in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: 27-Oct-2007, 08:23
  5. comple sentence with correct grammar
    By Anonymous in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 27-Nov-2003, 09:02

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •