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    proofreading

    If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments? Thanks always!!

    This course, which focuses on academic paragraph writing, is designed to help you develop some of the skills necessary to succeed with academic writing in the university environment. Though this course, students will not only practice writing skills but also develop basic grammar.


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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by bosun View Post
    If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments? Thanks always!!

    This course, which focuses on academic paragraph writing, is designed to help you develop some of the skills necessary to succeed with academic writing in the university environment. Though this course, students will not only practice writing skills but also develop basic grammar.
    Though - The absence of the letter "r" is rather conspicuous here.

    I'll add one for you: Through. There, now that's much better.

    I would use "in" instead of "with" - "succeed in academic writing".

    I'd say that's about it.


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    Re: proofreading

    Hello.

    Wouldn't it be better to change the second "this course" into "the course"?

    Thank you.


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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Daruma View Post
    Hello.

    Wouldn't it be better to change the second "this course" into "the course"?

    Thank you.
    That's a good question. I think it's better to leave it as "this course". However, if we do use "the", then I would also change "through" to "throughout", and, of course, "throughout the course" does not mean the same thing as "through the course".

    through this course - as a means to doing something or accomplishing something - With this meaning, I think that "this" is better than "the".

    I'd have to think about why I prefer "this", and not "the", in this example. I guess that "the" would make more sense if this course (the course?) were first preceded (qualified) by "a", indefinite article (determiner). Using "this" sounds more specific in this case, as well. I simply think it's better. There's no grammatical or structural reason that comes to mind.
    throughout the course - the entire duration of the course. - With this phrase, I think both "the" and "this" are good.

    Both are good, but it depends on what bosun really wants to say.
    Last edited by PROESL; 06-Sep-2009 at 00:28.

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