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I'm typing a short funny poem for my friends on a particular occasion and I cam out with the following poem.
I would appreciate it if any of you guys can improve it or add anything that ryhmes well with it.
May Allah forgive all your transgressions;
Which are so so many.
Reward your good deeds,
If at all you've done any.
Bliss your coming days
Of which you still have not many.
& Ease your guilt-ridden conscience
Wrodbalek tensani :))
The line in red is in Tunisian "ARABIC" and it means "Never forget about me"
I think it's meant as a mock insult, Sfl, in which case it is consistent as it stands.
Do you mean bless your coming days? Bliss is a noun and so the sentence makes no sense as written. I mean, you could say "I wish you bliss in your coming days," or "May you have bliss in your coming days," etc. (Not in this poem, obviously, because they don't fit; but you could use the word bliss that way.)Bliss your coming days
Aous02, how about this?
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May Allah forgive you of all your sins,
Of which there must be many;
And supply all your needs
And reward your good deeds
(Assuming that you have done any).
And may Allah bless your remaining days,
Of which you may not have many; (or "Of which I hope you have many" if you prefer)
And put your conscience at ease
As He reminds you to please
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Hope you like it.
Last edited by dragn; 19-Sep-2009 at 11:06.
Yes it's "bless" not bliss
Thanks Greg, your contribution was of help...
Concerning (your coming days...of which you still have not many)... this is culture-specefic. People in this part of the world don't fear death, it's welcome. So they take it as fun. If written to a westerner it may seem an insult beacause life is so dear to them..
Thanks to u all guys..
Here is an anecdote for u (a reward for ur help)
I Started translating a short story using "machine translation"...I typed the following title "حماري و الطوفان" and guess what i got!!! normally it should be "My donkey and The FLOOD" u know the story of Na=oah and the Ark.......but i got: "MY ASS AND THE FLOOD" !!!!!
I take it that it didn't quite hit the mark for you. Oh well, that's OK. At least I thought it was good, and I did have a lot of fun writing it.Thanks Greg, your contribution was of help...