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    proofreading. Urgent. Please help me!

    Hello!

    If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments?

    1. THe number of males who entered their first marriage decreased in the past 10 years. The figures in women's first marriage shows the similar pattern.

    2. Like marriages, the numer of divorcees also decreased slighly in the past 10 years.

    3. Presently, people divorce more than they did in the past.

    4. The influence of church or religious belieft on divorces has weakend. In others words, people choose to divorce for more practical reasons rather than hesitating for moral reasons.

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    Re: proofreading. Urgent. Please help me!

    Quote Originally Posted by bosun View Post
    1. THe number of males who entered their first marriages decreased in the past 10 years. The figures in women's first marriages shows a similar pattern.

    2. Like marriages, the numer of divorcees also decreased slighly in the past 10 years.

    3. Presently, people divorce more than they did in the past.

    4. The influence of church or religious belieft on divorces has weakend. In others words, people choose to divorce for more practical reasons rather than hesitating to do so for moral reasons.


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    Re: proofreading. Urgent. Please help me!

    1. THe number of males who entered their first marriage decreased in the past 10 years. The figures in women's first marriage shows the similar pattern.

    1. The number of males who entered INTO their first marriageS decreased in the past TEN years. The figures FOR women's first marriageS SHOW A similar pattern.
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    2. Like marriages, the numer of divorcees also decreased slighly in the past 10 years.

    2. Like marriages, the NUMBER of DIVORCES also decreased SLIGHTLY in the past TEN years.
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    3. Presently, people divorce more than they did in the past.
    (this is okay. Not everyone would use a comma after "presently")
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    4. The influence of church or religious belieft on divorces has weakend. In others words, people choose to divorce for more practical reasons rather than hesitating for moral reasons.

    4. The influence of church or OF religious BELIEFS on DIVORCE has WEAKENED. In other words, people choose to divorce FOR practical reasons MORE THAN THEY HESITATE for moral ONES.

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    Re: proofreading. Urgent. Please help me!

    Ann is right. It should be The figures for.....



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