This is okay. The English is good.
It's biggest fault is that it's a little weak and generic.
Parades and Me
When I was a kid I didn’t have the chance to see a parade in person.
> Not A parade, ANY parades
When I was a kid, I never had a chance to see a parade.
I watched our national day parades only on television.
I could only watch the National Day parades on TV..
I had a wish to go to the capital city and watch it as an audience, but it never happened.
I longed to go to (name the city) to watch one in person, but I never did.
Now as a grownup person I have the opportunity to watch parades for different occasions.I like to see parades for different occasions.
> It's too generic when you lapse into non-specifics like "different occasions" -- especially when you make that non-informative remark TWICE
But now that I'm a grown-up, I can go to all the parades I want.
National day parades, festival parades and Christmas day parades are all fun to see.
National Day parades, festival parades, Christmas Day parades -- I love them all.
I love to see parade volunteers in nice costumes.
> too bland and generic
> Add at least one more sensory detail -- "The smell of the marchers' sweaty boots" -- anything
I love the dazzling costumes and the blare of the trumpets. I love the bang of the kettledrums and the way the prancing majorettes fling their batons flashing and spinning into the sky. I buy myself a bag of hot peanuts roasted in their shells, and sometimes I secretly want to buy myself a yellow balloon.
I enjoy watching kids collecting candies and other tokens from parade volunteers.
Sometimes it reminds my childhood wish that never came true.
> It's a good point but faded out and faint in expression.
I love watching the kids scramble for candy and trinkets tossed from the floats. Going to a parade is practically like making a childhood wish come true.
Here's a corny rendition of I Love A Parade
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