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    Are words needed?

    A person whose life condition is (in) the world of Humanity has few wants and feels what he has is good enough for his living. He never goes and pursues what is more than necessary and appreciates what he has with him.

    Is 'in' needed? Is 'with him' necessary?

    Are there any errors in the text?

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    Re: Are words needed?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    A person whose life condition is (in) the world of Humanity has few wants and feels what he has is good enough for his living. He never goes and pursues what is more than necessary and appreciates what he has with him.

    Is 'in' needed? Is 'with him' necessary?

    Are there any errors in the text?

    Many thanks.

    I don't know the range of meanings and uses of the expression "the world of Humanity" as it is used in this belief system, but i think I would keep the "in."

    The upper-case letter on "Humanity" but not on "world" has to be decided on the basis of the meanings and uses of this phrase. I would ordinarily think that either both should be capitalized (a distinct metaphorical place: the World of Humanity) or that neither should be (the world of humanity in its generic sense.) But don't capitalize "Humanity" as if it were a proper noun.

    Don't use "feel" as a synonym for "opine."

    "for his living" does not capture the meaning, as far as I can tell. "good enough to live on" is probably closer, but even so, the rest of the sentence supports this meaning without its needing to be said.

    Don't use the locution "goes and does" something. Just say, "He does it."

    To reverse the meaning, use "but," not "and"

    Whether or not "with him" should be used depends on the meaning. Including "with him" suggests a person who is moving about. It gives the idea of "what he carries around." Since I think it is not likely that this is the intended meaning, I think the phrase could be deleted.

    A person whose life condition is in the world of humanity has few wants and thinks that what he has is good enough. He never pursues what is more than necessary, but appreciates what he has.

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    #3

    Re: Are words needed?

    Hi Ann

    Many thanks for the detailed and clear reply.

    I deeply appreciate your help.


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    Re: Are words needed?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    Hi Ann

    Many thanks for the detailed and clear reply.

    I deeply appreciate your help.

    No problemo! Glad to be of service.

    I notice that each sentence has two parts, but I think that the second halves of the sentences could be swapped. It seems like the second half of sentence 2 goes better with the first half of sentence 1 (and the same for the other set). I would consider switching the second halves around, like this:

    A person whose life condition is in the world of humanity has few wants and appreciates what he has. He never pursues what is more than necessary, but thinks that what he has is good enough.
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    Re: Are words needed?

    Many thanks for the revised version.

    I appreciate very much your great effort.

    With warmest wishes.

    Elaine

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