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    The brutal murder probems.

    Dear Teachers,
    Could you tell me whether it is correct to say in English : "It was a brutal murder committed by two young men on a four-member farm family."
    I am not sure if it isn't a calque from my mother tongue.

    Thank you in advance, I would be grateful if you helped me

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    Re: The brutal murder probems.

    Quote Originally Posted by cat's_eyes View Post
    Dear Teachers,
    Could you tell me whether it is correct to say in English : "It was a brutal murder committed by two young men on a four-member farm family."
    I am not sure if it isn't a calque from my mother tongue.

    Thank you in advance, I would be grateful if you helped me
    It was a brutal murder, committed by two young men on a four-member farming family."

    It's better with the comma and "farming".


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    Re: The brutal murder probems.

    Thank you very much, now it's really better :)


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    Re: The brutal murder probems.

    It's "farm family" or "farming family," but "farm family" is more common in the United States. The reference is probably to the incident that inspired Truman Capote's book In Cold Blood. The murder occurred in Kansas, thus the American style is to be expected.

    Greg


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    Re: The brutal murder probems.

    Quote Originally Posted by cat's_eyes View Post
    Dear Teachers,
    Could you tell me whether it is correct to say in English : "It was a brutal murder committed by two young men on a four-member farm family."
    I am not sure if it isn't a calque from my mother tongue.

    Thank you in advance, I would be grateful if you helped me
    It's the murder OF a family, not the murder ON a family.

    The issue with this sentence is the difficulty of managing the prepositional phrases.

    I think the best rendering is:

    It was the brutal murder of a four-member farm family, committed by two young men.

    I also like:

    It was a brutal murder -- committed by two young men -- of a four-member farm family.


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    Re: The brutal murder probems.

    Quote Originally Posted by dragn View Post
    It's "farm family" or "farming family," but "farm family" is more common in the United States. The reference is probably to the incident that inspired Truman Capote's book In Cold Blood. The murder occurred in Kansas, thus the American style is to be expected.

    Greg
    Good to know:)

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