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    Sentence question.very grateful!

    "I was afraid of a person, who was a great musician and devoted himself to the band, would supplant me as the band's new leader."

    Have something mistakes in this sentence? I am confused now,please help me,thx!

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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    Let me ask a question first - is this an actual person, who exists? Or is this someone who may come along - a potential rival, but not yet a specific person.


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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    I think it is a potential rival, but not yet a specific person. The most important thing I want to know is that whether this sentence can erpress its meaning clearly and has someting mistakes or not. Thx!


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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    CAN SOMEONE HELP ME? THANKS!!

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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    Quote Originally Posted by 00614 View Post
    "I was afraid of a person, who was a great musician and devoted himself to the band, would supplant me as the band's new leader."

    Have something mistakes in this sentence? I am confused now,please help me,thx!
    "I was afraid that a person, who was a great musician and who devoted himself to the band, would supplant me as the band's new leader."

    Now it's ok.

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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    Quote Originally Posted by bhaisahab View Post
    "I was afraid that a person, who was a great musician and who devoted himself to the band, would supplant me as the band's new leader."

    Now it's ok.
    That's okay as a restrictive clause, but to make it non-restrictive, the comma after person has to go. I think that is what Barb was alluding to.

    "I was afraid that a person who was a great musician and who devoted himself to the band would supplant me as the band's new leader."


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    THANK YOU VERY VERY MUCH,I IMPROVE A LOT!

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    Re: Sentence question.very grateful!

    Yes, thanks, that's exactly why I needed to know if it was a real person.

    Sorry I didn't return in time.

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