One time, I felt deeply understood was when my sister turned off the light for me because I fell asleep. I'm not the type of person who falls asleep easily. Sometimes, when I went to bed before my sister did, I wanted the lights to be turned off but she wouldn't. I couldn't sleep. Last night, she turned off the light for me when I went to bed. And I was appreciated.
Leave "One time, I felt deeply understood was when.." as it is,
my teacher said that this "..my sister turned off the light for me because i fell asleep." is a fragment,
but i don't know how to correct it.
there's one more sentence fragment in this writing, i believe it's "sometimes, when i went to the bed before......."
can anyone help me correct it please? and other grammar errors if possible..thanks!!
How are you defining 'sentence fragment'? To me, it's an utterance that isn't a complete sentence grammatically but can be understood in the context- the meaning is complete, but it doesn't add up to a sentence, so I don't really see why the my sister part is a fragment. It might sound better with the past perfect (had fallen asleep), though.