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    job applications

    If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments?


    1. it discusses the higher success rate of female job applicants for management positions..

    2. It discusses why women are better at getting a senior position compared with their counterparts, males.

    3. It discusses the progress in managerial and executive positions made by women.

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    Re: job applications

    Quote Originally Posted by bosun View Post
    If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments?


    1.It discusses the higher success rate of female job applicants for management positions.

    2. It discusses why women are better at getting a senior position compared with their counterparts, males.

    3. It discusses the progress in managerial and executive positions made by women.
    I would suggest a couple of changes in sentences 2 and 3, 1 is ok.

    2. It discusses why women are better at getting a senior position compared to their male counterparts.
    3. It discusses the progress being made by women in managerial and executive positions.

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