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    is this good English

    Hi dear experts. I'd be grateful if you could tell if the sentence below sounds OK.

    " The studies are related to the factors which determine the reliability of a particular system and the way they affect its functionality. "


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    Quote Originally Posted by snade17 View Post
    Hi dear experts. I'd be grateful if you could tell if the sentence below sounds OK.

    " The studies are related to the factors which determine the reliability of a particular system and the way they affect its functionality. "
    This is good.


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    Re: is this good English

    Hello dear experts. Really this is a very great idea thank u very much


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    " The studies are related to the factors which determine the reliability of a particular system and the way they affect its functionality. "

    "related to" means (1) be causally connected
    No, a study does not act as a 'cause' - it tries to examine cause and effect.

    (2) have reference to
    No. A study has to be completely independent, put the subject under the 'microscope' of research.

    The use of 'are related to' here is confusing when the term is used to refer to other research in the field, or some other theoretical thinking in a closely associated area of study. Not the very factors you are scrutinising!

    Try 'investigate', 'examine', 'analyse', or even... even... 'look at'. But not, 'are related to".

    Also, "...factors which that determine..."
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    Thank you very much! You were most helpful!

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    Re: is this good English

    What about?


    The studies examine factors determining the reliability of a particular system and their effect on its functionality.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Excalibur View Post

    Also, "...factors which that determine..."
    Sorry David, but no! Both relative connectors work with restrictive clauses.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Soup View Post
    What about?

    The studies examine factors determining the reliability of a particular system and their effect on its functionality.
    I agree the beginning should be something like this. Also, what kind of system? It should be stated.


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    Quote Originally Posted by konungursvia View Post
    It should be stated.
    Hello P,

    Why? Who is the addressee?

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    Re: is this good English

    Well, it's clearly an academic paper, and likely the abstract. So, to make it easier for other academics to determine whether it's pertinent to their research, it should be crystal clear right from the start whether it's about IT systems, agronomical systems, marketing systems, nuclear fusion systems, etc. etc. ad hoc genus omne.

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