Could you,please, check and correct my cover letter and CV.
I will be very appreciated if you do!
All advices and remarks are welcome!
My cover letter:
Dear Sir / Madam,
From your company's web site I learned about your need for
an entry-level specialist in Corporate Finance Department.
I will complete my studies at Moscow University of Steel and
Alloys with a major in economics and management in mid-June
of 2004, and will be available for employment at that time.
My aspiration is to work for a company that has your
excellent reputation. I am confident that my combination of
practical work experience and solid educational experience
has prepared me for making an immediate contribution to
Deloitte Touche Tohmatsu.
Enclosed is a copy of my resume, which more fully details my
I would welcome the opportunity to interview with you, and
will contact you in the next two weeks to see if you need
any additional information from me.
Thank you for your consideration.
Name: Sukhanova Nadezhda
DOB: April 5 ,1983
Address: #904 bld.83/1, Profsoyuznaya street, 117279 Moscow, Russia
2000-present– Moscow Institute of Steel and Alloys
Major: Economics and management
Economics and Informatics Department.
Anticipated graduation date: June, 2005
07/2004-08/2004, 07/2003-08/2003 – Novolipetsk Iron and Steel Corporation, Lipetsk, Russia.
Responsibilities: unfinished production calculation; cost accounting calculation; research of ferrous metals market.
07/2002-08/2002 – Cherepovets Iron and Steel Works ‘Severstal’, Cherepovets, Russia.
In-depth study of industrial process.
08/2004-09/2004-Bank ‘Russian Standard’, Sales Department manager, consumer crediting;
11/2003-01/2004-Tax Registration Center, accountant;
08/2003-10/2003-‘Vinta Star’ company (Automated Accounting Systems), consultant-accountant
10/2004-02/2005- Business English (upper-intermediate level)-English First Russia
02/2003-06/2003- English course (upper-intermediate level)-Moscow International Higher Business School
04/1997-10/1998- English course (intermediate level)-Russian Branch of the European School of Education by Correspondence
English - fluent;
French – basic level
Computer literate: Windows, MS Office, Internet, Timeline, Statistica 6.0, FAR manager.
Took part in international (Poland, Krakow) and regional scientific conferences(05/2004).
Communicative, responsible, initiative, able to work both individually and as a part of a team, able to work in stress environment
Thanks in advance!!!
Last edited by Curly; 16-Mar-2005 at 22:02.
I'll start- I would change the opening line= get to the point about writitng for the job.