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    revising of only five succinct sentences

    Dear teachers,

    Would you be kind enough to revise the following sentences?

    1. I took a straw poll.

    straw poll = an unofficial vote or poll indicating the trend of opinion on a candidate or issue; an unofficial vote or poll indicating how people feel about a candidate or issue

    2. Let's go paint the town or something.

    paint the town = to go on a spree

    3. Looks like you weren't the one with the mixed-up priorities, huh?

    mixed-up = perplexed

    4. I think it's gonna take me a little longer than you might like.

    take a little longer = calls for a little longer time

    5. He came back, because Irene threatened to put the dog to sleep if he didn’t.

    threaten = warn someone that he/she/it face punishment or other bad consequences if they do not act in a certain way

    “put an animal to sleep” is a way of saying to kill them

    Thank you for your efforts.

    Regards,

    V.

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    #2

    Re: revising of only five succinct sentences

    Would you be kind enough to revise the following sentences?

    1. I took a straw poll. This is fine.

    straw poll = an unofficial vote or poll indicating the trend of opinion on a candidate or issue; an unofficial vote or poll indicating how people feel about a candidate or issue

    2. Let's go paint the town or something.

    paint the town = to go on a spree have a lively night out on the town. I've usually heard it as "Paint the town red"

    3. Looks like you weren't the one with the mixed-up priorities, huh?

    mixed-up = perplexed In this context, it means that the person is placing value on the wrong things, e.g., making money instead of time with family

    4. I think it's gonna take me a little longer than you might like.

    I BEG you to never use "gonna" in writing.
    take a little longer = calls for a little longer time

    5. He came back, because Irene threatened to put the dog to sleep if he didn’t. This is okay. A weird threat.

    threaten = warn someone that he/she/it face punishment or other bad consequences if they do not act in a certain way

    “put an animal to sleep” is a way of saying to kill them. Yes, but it's because the animal is sick or injured. You don't hit a deer with your car and say you put it to sleep, but when your dog has cancer, the humane thing to do is to put her to sleep.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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