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    Make it effective, please

    Dear Teacher

    Please correct the following message and make it more effective. It is to congratulate my boss for his salary increase. (Is it award or reward? He got the special grade in Basic Salary)

    Congratulations on your "SPECIAL GRADE"

    Your great efforts, dedication and excellent leadership brought you the "Special Grade" as an award. You really deserve it.

    God may bleass you with many more rewards in future.

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    #2

    Re: Make it effective, please

    I'd say "reward", and I wouldn't use the quotation marks because it may sound sarcastic about his "Grade". How do you see it in standard Indian English?

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    Re: Make it effective, please

    Quote Originally Posted by syku View Post
    I'd say "reward", and I wouldn't use the quotation marks because it may sound sarcastic about his "Grade". How do you see it in standard Indian English?
    Thanks. Here in our company there is GRADE system. One who gets higher grade he would get more basic salary.

    Please do help.

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    Re: Make it effective, please

    I agree. Lose the quotations marks (in both places).
    Also you could consider an exclamation point.
    Congratulations on your SPECIAL GRADE!
    Oh, and spell 'bless' right.

    Otherwise, I'm sure your boss will be pleased with what you've written.

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    Re: Make it effective, please

    Is it to okay to write the following:

    Hearty Congratulations on your NEW GRADE! (or Hearty Congratulations on getting NEW GRADE! which one is more effective?)

    Your great efforts, dedication and excellent leadership brought you the NEW GRADE as a reward (or as reward - Is "a" essential here?). You really deserve it.

    God may bless you with many more rewards in future.
    Last edited by sweetie123; 19-Dec-2009 at 12:39.

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