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    goodday i would like to know a way to rephrase this awkward sentence. "Getting the chance to show others how to do the right thing and how to be a leader themselves taken away crushed me but i could not sit there feeling sorry for myself. "

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    Re: rephrase

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    goodday i would like to know a way to rephrase this awkward sentence. "Getting the chance to show others how to do the right thing and how to be a leader themselves taken away crushed me but i could not sit there feeling sorry for myself. "
    Having had the chance to show others how to do the right thing and be leaders themselves taken from me left me feeling crushed, but I couldn't sit there feeling sorry for myself.

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    Re: rephrase

    Getting the chance to show others how to do the right thing and how to be a leader themselves taken away crushed me but i could not sit there feeling sorry for myself.

    Losing the chance to show others how to do the right thing and how to be leaders crushed me, but I could not sit there and feel sorry for myself.

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    I felt crushed when my chance to show others how to do the right thing and be a leader themselves was taken away, but I couldn't sit there feeling sorry for myself.

    Is this also a "rephrase"?
    I felt crushed when my chance of demonstrating virtue and leadership was taken away, but I could not wallow in self-pity.

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    Re: rephrase

    Quote Originally Posted by syku View Post
    I felt crushed when my chance to show others how to do the right thing and be a leader themselves was taken away, but I couldn't sit there feeling sorry for myself.

    Is this also a "rephrase"? No, it's not a rephrase; you changed the meaning too much.
    The original sentence talked about showing others how to do the right thing and how to be leaders. Your sentence only mentions your chance of demonstrating virtue and leadership.

    I felt crushed when my chance of demonstrating virtue and leadership was taken away, but I could not wallow in self-pity.
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