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    dating

    Hi there,
    please proofread the sentences.

    One of the disadvantages of teenagers dating is that they are usually not mature enough to handle a relationship. They may feel bored after dating for a while, and request to end the relationship. The one being dumped will feel upset and useless. The separation sometimes may bring disastrous consequences to the lovers.
    tks
    pete


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    Re: dating

    Quote Originally Posted by peter123 View Post
    Hi there,
    please proofread the sentences.

    One of the disadvantages of teenagers dating is that they are usually not mature enough to handle a relationship. They may feel bored after dating for a while, and request to end the relationship. The one being dumped will feel upset and useless. The separation may sometimes bring disastrous consequences to the lovers.
    tks
    pete
    (Not a teacher)

    I'm not sure if this was a mistake or not, but it sounds more correct as 'may sometimes'.

    Also, I can't help but think you should change 'teenagers' to 'young teenagers'. A nineteen year-old seems pretty mature enough to handle a relationship, I would think. Certainly the law thinks so, with most countries allowing people to marry from about sixteen-eighteen. But that's just an opinion.


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    Re: dating

    Quote Originally Posted by peter123 View Post
    Hi there,
    please proofread the sentences.

    One of the disadvantages of teenagers dating is that they are usually not mature enough to handle a relationship. They may feel bored after dating for a while, and request to end the relationship. The one being dumped will feel upset and useless. The separation sometimes may bring disastrous consequences to the lovers.
    tks
    pete
    I don't think request is the most appropriate term to describe this. Maybe it's better if you use: want, choose
    also sometimes may sounds a bit odd. it's better if you write "may sometimes"

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