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    Smile proofreading--two sentences

    Dear teacher


    I am translating a letter from Chinese and trying to express these:

    1 There were 250 graduates of business school, almost all of whom majored in only one field in 2003.
    2 He was the only one who acquried dual Master of Accounting and Master of Science in Finance.
    2 He got excellent scores.

    Here is my attempt:

    In May 2003, he was the only one who acquired dual Master of Accounting and Master of Science in Finance among 250 graudates of business school. And what’s more impressive is he attained degrees with a GPA of 3.8.

    Did I convey it clearly? Could you help me? Thanks in advance.


    LQZ

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    Re: proofreading--two sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by LQZ View Post
    Dear teacher


    I am translating a letter from Chinese and trying to express these:

    1 There were 250 graduates of business school, almost all of whom majored in only one field in 2003.
    2 He was the only one who acquried dual Master of Accounting and Master of Science in Finance.
    2 He got excellent scores.

    Here is my attempt:

    In May 2003, he was the only one who acquired dual Master of Accounting and Master of Science in Finance among 250 graudates of business school. And what’s more impressive is he attained degrees with a GPA of 3.8.

    Did I convey it clearly? Could you help me? Thanks in advance.


    LQZ
    I would say:
    "Graduating in May, 2003, he was the only one out of the 250 business school graduates who attained both a Master of Accounting and Master of Science in Finance, doing so with a GPA of 3.8."

    Do you refer to it as a Master of Accounting or (as we would in the USA) a Master's Degree in Accounting?

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