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    Kinldy check my sentence

    Here is another event from MX that you will be adding to your life’s special moments dairy. We have made it our aim to soak your in pure moments because you are PURE card holder

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    Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Okay, I will kindly check your sentence.

    To be honest, I don't get its meaning at all.

    The first sentence seems okay to me.
    The second one causes 2 questions to me.

    1)
    "Your in pure moments" - Isn't the "in" too much?
    First I thought the "your" could be wrong, but I guess it makes sense.
    Just the "in" makes me wonder...

    2)
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    you are PURE card holder" - I believe an "a" would be okay.
    That means:
    "you are a PURE card holder"

    I think I have got its meaning now, but maybe a teacher will help you better.

    Sorry, my font got messed up - no idea why.

    Cheers!


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    Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Nightmare85 View Post
    Okay, I will kindly check your sentence.

    To be honest, I don't get its meaning at all.

    The first sentence seems okay to me.
    The second one causes 2 questions to me.

    1)
    "Your in pure moments" - Isn't the "in" too much?
    First I thought the "your" could be wrong, but I guess it makes sense.
    Just the "in" makes me wonder...

    2)
    "you are PURE card holder" - I believe an "a" would be okay.
    That means:
    "you are a PURE card holder"

    I think I have got its meaning now, but maybe a teacher will help you better.

    Sorry, my font got messed up - no idea why.

    Cheers!
    Thaanks for you kind reply..it should be read as follows:

    Here is another event from MX that you will be adding to your life’s special moments dairy. We have made it our aim to soak you in pure moments because you are PURE card holder

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    Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Thaanks for you kind reply..it should be read as follows:

    Here is another event from MX that you will be adding to your life’s special moments dairy. We have made it our aim to soak you in pure moments because you are PURE card holder


    dairy???? do you mean milk products??


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    Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Here is another event from MX that you will be adding to your life’s special moments dairy. We have made it our aim to soak your in pure moments because you are PURE card holder

    Iwill be very specific.. in the 1st sentence"that you will be adding to your life’s special moments dairy." can be simply written as :you will add". "We have made it our aim" can be written as "its our aim" or "our aim is to...". ""soak your" can be written as "soak you" (seems to be a typo) and "you are pure card holder"...article missing "you are a pure card holder"

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    Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Ah, okay, that means it was actually a "you", not a "your"

    Oh yes, I guess it should be "diary", not "dairy".

    Cheers!

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    Exclamation Re: Kinldy check my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Here is another event from MX that you will be inclined to add to your life’s special moments dairy. We have made it our aim to soak you in pure and pleasant moments because you are a PURE card holder

    If your aim is to use it as a text for advertisment, please try this.

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