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    long sentence

    Does this long sentence sound OK in English? Do you find it easy to get the point?
    "If one strives at a quick solution of the problems worked on without first getting rid of the emotional tension and without first understanding the problem, it is most likely that the solution arrived at is not a good one."

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    Re: long sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by snade17 View Post
    Does this long sentence sound OK in English? Do you find it easy to get the point?
    "If one strives at a quick solution of the problems worked on without first getting rid of the emotional tension and without first understanding the problem, it is most likely that the solution arrived at is not a good one."
    ***NOT A TEACHER***I think you want the posters to give you their honest opinions; so, here's my humble thoughts: (1) I think your sentence is grammatically fine, (2) I personally do not think it sounds "OK," (3) I sincerely feel that it does not get to the point, and (4) I respectfully suggest that you rework the sentence. In order to get to the point, perhaps you should consider stating your conclusion first. Something like: Good solutions are unlikely without a firm understanding of the problem and the elimination of any irrational emotions.

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    Re: long sentence

    Thank you very much! You were most helpful!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by snade17 View Post
    Thank you very much! You were most helpful!!!
    You are welcome. Thank you for your thoughtful note.

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    Re: long sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by snade17 View Post
    Does this long sentence sound OK in English? Do you find it easy to get the point?
    "If one strives for a quick solution to the problems worked on without first getting rid of the emotional tension and without first understanding the problem, it is most likely that the solution arrived at will not be a good one."
    I'd make the changes in blue.

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    Re: long sentence

    Additionally, you have "problems" in the first part but the singular "problem" in the latter part.

    I like Parser's rewrite with the conclusion first.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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