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    which sentences are better?

    1 It is not until lots of people get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that they stop smking.


    2.It is not until they get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smking.

    which one is better and are ther correct grammatically?




    It is not until getting cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smking.

    Is this sentence correct ang clear?

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    #2

    Re: which sentences are better?

    Quote Originally Posted by kelvin123 View Post
    1 It is not until lots of people get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that they stop smking.


    2.It is not until they get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smking.

    which one is better and are ther correct grammatically?




    It is not until getting cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smking.

    Is this sentence correct ang clear?
    ***NOT A TEACHER***Kelvin123, perhaps your sentence could be something like: Many people do not stop smoking until they get a cancer that has a high fatality rate. Thank you.


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    Re: which sentences are better?

    Quote Originally Posted by kelvin123 View Post
    1 It is not until lots of people get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that they stop smking.


    2.It is not until they get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smking.


    fertile >> fertility
    fatal >> fatality

    which one is better and are ther correct grammatically?

    I would phrase this as " Often it is only when people develop lung cancer, which has high rates of fatality, that they stop smoking".




    It is not until getting cancers , which have high fatality rates, that lots of people stop smoking.

    Is this sentence correct and clear?

    As a general point, smoking tobacco and similar products is only connected to lung cancer, and is not currently shown to be a cause of other cancers.

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    Re: which sentences are better?

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    As a general point, smoking tobacco and similar products is only connected to lung cancer, and is not currently shown to be a cause of other cancers.
    thanks.
    but I only want to concerned with the usage of English in the sentences

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    Re: which sentences are better?

    Quote Originally Posted by kelvin123 View Post
    1 It is not until lots of people get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that they stop smoking.

    2.It is not until they get cancers , which have high fatility rates, that lots of people stop smoking.

    When it comes to being grammatical, I would say that it's OK for these sentences, but as for clarity, there is something that bothers me;

    "cancers , which have high fatility rates"
    Yes, it's a fact and already known by most of the people but in this kind of contexts about smoking it is customarily made some references to the deaths connected to smoking.So I wonder if you meant "high fatality rates due to smoking". If it so I can't see a proper place in the sentence to put this. Thus, your sentence boils down to; "It is not until lots of people get cancers that they stop smoking.", which sounds way better to me.

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