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Having a reliable model, good intention, being dynamic, toleration of hardships, putting common habits aside, abstinence, praying and making friends with good people are all ways to lead a healthy life.
Dedicated to my father, Reza Seifollahi
A sad and tired black piece was sitting under a tree.

A brilliant and beautiful piece was passing over its head.
"I want to be like you. But …" The black piece said.
"If you want to be like me, you should start to move". The brilliant and beautiful piece said.
Having said this, the brilliant piece went away.
The Black piece decides to move.
It jumped up but stumbled over. Bump!
It jumped again and bumped again.
It kept jumping so much so that reached a downhill and then started rolling.
It fell into the sea and sank.
It kept staying there until it became white and clean.
Now that the black piece had turned into a white and clean piece, it asked a sea horse to take it out f the sea
But the sea horse couldn't do that.
It stayed just over there until it saw a whale and asked him for help.
The whale threw it into the sky.
And the white piece stuck to the sky.
Between the black and white curtains of the sky, it chose the black one for living.
Because its help in the black curtain was felt more.
It stayed in the black curtain to become the brilliant moon of the dark nights of other pieces.

 

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thank you very much
yes,line mean that its' help was needed more in the black curtain
 

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I use your directions Gillnetter
 
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