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Topic: Why should people do enough exercise? What is your opinion? (within 300 words, at least 250 words; IELTS for GENERAL TRAINING)
As a healthy lifestyle and recreation, playing sports has recently become increasingly popular around the world. In my opinion, it is worthwhile for people, whoever they are, teenagers or the elderly, to play sports. Although, there are still some people who do not have sufficient exercise and consider it as a waste of time.
Appropriate aerobic exercise can physically and mentally enhance people’s health. It can release people’s psychological pressure that comes from fierce social competition and severe financial stresses, due to its function as a kind of entertainment that make people relax. In addition, for those who lead a sedentary lifestyle and become over weight, proper exercise can stimulate the circulation of the blood and accelerate the elimination of wastes from the body. Moreover, for those minor ailments like having the influenza or catching a fever, combining with exercise such as going out for a walk will be better than simply medical treatment.
On the other hand, not everyone in any condition can benefit from any kinds of sports. In other words, people should be careful when choosing a kind of sport that is more suitable to them. For instance, some people who are suffering from heart-related diseases are more likely to be hurt while playing violent sports such as gliding or horse racing; therefore, they should select some mild exercise like jogging or swimming.
In conclusion, I believe that sports have played a significant role in our daily life. Proper exercise can benefit our health
thenand improve our standard of living and prolong our life expectation. But we should be aware that not just any kinds of exercises are suitable to everyone.
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