tvmtuan
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Hello everybody,
I am applying for a scholarship and they ask me to write a short essay describing my academic goals. My academic goal is to earn a degree in Web Development. I wrote one. Would you please revise it for me. Since my native language is not English, and I have just been writing in English for a short period of time, there might be some confusing sentences. Please, let me know if there are any
Here is my essay:
My academic goal is to earn a degree in Web Development major. That is the reason why I attended to the University of Arkansas at Fort Smith with that major. After I achieve my academic goal, I can start my career as a web developer. I really love this major, and I know I am going to be successful with this major.
Since I was a child, I was fascinated in computers. I love every aspect of it, especially in developing websites. Back to the days when I was in junior high school, when I was first working with a computer in my school, I was impressed when I learned how the machine worked. At the time, I knew that I would follow a major related to computer when I go to college. My goal became more specific when I was in senior high school. At that time, I wanted to make a website for my club in my school. I was the only person who knew about computer in my club, so I did a research about how to develop a website. As the research moved on, I was amazed by the world of website developing. I fell in love with the work of developing websites, and I knew that my major in college will be Web Development.
I have prepared well for my major in college. I took some courses about computer and website developing in high school, so I have a good understanding of web development. I feel very confident in college because of my preparation. I know that I will become successful in my academic goal because not only I prepared well for my college but also I love my major.
When you are interested in something, you are going to do it with passion. That is my case. I really enjoy the courses which I am taking in my college. I know that I am going to achieve my academic goal which is to earn a degree in Web Development with good grades.
I am applying for a scholarship and they ask me to write a short essay describing my academic goals. My academic goal is to earn a degree in Web Development. I wrote one. Would you please revise it for me. Since my native language is not English, and I have just been writing in English for a short period of time, there might be some confusing sentences. Please, let me know if there are any
Here is my essay:
My academic goal is to earn a degree in Web Development major. That is the reason why I attended to the University of Arkansas at Fort Smith with that major. After I achieve my academic goal, I can start my career as a web developer. I really love this major, and I know I am going to be successful with this major.
Since I was a child, I was fascinated in computers. I love every aspect of it, especially in developing websites. Back to the days when I was in junior high school, when I was first working with a computer in my school, I was impressed when I learned how the machine worked. At the time, I knew that I would follow a major related to computer when I go to college. My goal became more specific when I was in senior high school. At that time, I wanted to make a website for my club in my school. I was the only person who knew about computer in my club, so I did a research about how to develop a website. As the research moved on, I was amazed by the world of website developing. I fell in love with the work of developing websites, and I knew that my major in college will be Web Development.
I have prepared well for my major in college. I took some courses about computer and website developing in high school, so I have a good understanding of web development. I feel very confident in college because of my preparation. I know that I will become successful in my academic goal because not only I prepared well for my college but also I love my major.
When you are interested in something, you are going to do it with passion. That is my case. I really enjoy the courses which I am taking in my college. I know that I am going to achieve my academic goal which is to earn a degree in Web Development with good grades.
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