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    Is the sentence correct?

    She unskins the plum with her teeth, withdraws the stone and passes the flesh of the fruit into his mouth.

    Is the above sentence natural? Are there any errors.

    Thanks in advance.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    not a teacher

    The verbs don't sound natural to me. Suggestions:

    unskins - peels
    withdraws - removes
    passes the flesh of the fruits.. - puts the fruit...


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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    She unskins the plum with her teeth, withdraws the stone and passes the flesh of the fruit into his mouth.

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    She peels the skins of the plum with her teeth, removes the seeds and puts the fruit into his mouth.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    She unskins the plum with her teeth, withdraws the stone and passes the flesh of the fruit into his mouth.

    Is the above sentence natural? Are there any errors.

    Thanks in advance.
    It wouldn't be very natural in speech but In literature it's fine. It's grammatically correct and understandable.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    'Unskin' is not a proper word actually.
    The seed (not seeds) in a plum is called a stone.
    The words 'withdraw' and 'pass' are not appropriate.
    Such writing is not suitable for literature surely.

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    #6

    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    'Unskin' is not a proper word actually.
    Indeed? So why does OED say:

    Unskin:
    trans. To divest of skin; to flay. Also fig.
    1598 FLORIO, Discotennare, to flea, to vnskin. a1652 BROME New Acad. IV. ii, I'le..not only unmask, but unskin her face too. 1655 MOUFET & BENNET Health's Improv. xxx. 278 Flaying and unskinning themselves as it were of reasons robe. 1935 T. S. ELIOT Murder in Cathedral i. 20 And our hearts are torn from us, our brains unskinned like the layers of an onion.


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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    raymott
    Try looking it up in other online dictionaries.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    raymott
    Try looking it up in other online dictionaries.
    Are you certain that you are correct in saying that 'unskin' is not an appropriate word?

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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    Are you certain that you are correct in saying that 'unskin' is not an appropriate word?
    "Unskin" is a fairly obscure word, but it exists and you are free to use it.


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    Re: Is the sentence correct?

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    The way you have written it originally, it is fine for literature, as bhaisahab said. Also, to me the verbs used make it sound sexual, or at least seductive - as if there is delicacy and intricacy to it.

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