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    Question THAT

    Hi there Could anyone help me with the following sentences please:

    1. My first goal is to thank your company for the support we were given in this event that has been quite profitable for us.

    2. I think this new global scene goes some way to offering a lasting solution to the problem of social discrimination, that people who live in deprived areas have suffered.

    Can anyone tell me why in the first sentence there is no comma before "that" but in the second sentence there is...?

    Thank you!

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    Re: THAT

    Quote Originally Posted by squirrel88 View Post
    Hi there Could anyone help me with the following sentences please:

    1. My first goal is to thank your company for the support we were given in this event that has been quite profitable for us.

    2. I think this new global scene goes some way to offering a lasting solution to the problem of social discrimination, that people who live in deprived areas have suffered.

    Can anyone tell me why in the first sentence there is no comma before "that" but in the second sentence there is...?

    Thank you!
    Welcome!
    There should not be a comma in sentence 2.

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    Re: THAT

    Quote Originally Posted by squirrel88 View Post
    Hi there Could anyone help me with the following sentences please:

    1. My first goal is to thank your company for the support we were given in this event that has been quite profitable for us.

    2. I think this new global scene goes some way to offering a lasting solution to the problem of social discrimination, that people who live in deprived areas have suffered.

    Can anyone tell me why in the first sentence there is no comma before "that" but in the second sentence there is...?

    Thank you!
    Both these sentences have problems which go beyond commas. The first sentence is ambiguous; which of these was been profitable for us, the event or the support? The second is what I would call a "run-on sentence." By the end of it I am starting to lose the thread. It would be clearer if you were to drop "the problem of" (which is unnecessary) and add "the" before social discrimination (and, as 2006 points out, drop out the comma.)
    "I think this new global scene goes some way to offering a lasting solution to the problem of the social discrimination that people who live in deprived areas have suffered."

    But I would suggest that both of the sentences could use some major reshaping. Keep things simple.

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