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    #1

    Please help me to correct this...

    Guys Please help to correct and improve my Note below...

    My Dream Job

    Before I tell you about my dream Job, let tell you a bit about my childhood and all the things I've been through

    My Childhood
    I am the youngest child with 3 siblings,they are a sister and 2 brothers (But my younger brother has passed away), My Mom is a single parent, 'cuz My dad has married to other woman,when I was five years old,
    I spent my whole childhood in the village named ............ It's a small village around ..............(I intentionally put it blank), My childhood wasn't too special, CUz I was just a countryside child who lives in poverty, My mom used to be a small farmer who rent land to be planted and the harvest was absolutely based on nature, if it's dray(dry season) then we got no harvest...

    In addition, when I was at 5th grade, I was faced to a dreadful (gruesome) situation/fact, My mom was sued for somtething she didn't do, actually it's just a simple family case, and it shouldn't have to take to the police, it's merely a little argument between my mom and my auntie and I have no idea why she should report it to the police, because it could be settled peacefully

    And when I was at Junior high school our life start changing whne my beloved mom dared to start a a new career as a tailor and salon (what is the name of someone who work in salon?) she's such a wonderful talent, 'cuz she's totally autodidact, but when our life started getting better, we had to face the biggest loss in our life, my brother was die of malpractice, it made our life closely despair especially my mom, 'cuz He(my dead brother) was her blue-eyed boy...

    I think it's enough about the pathetic stories, now I'll tell you my dream job, on one hand, thing that actually inspired me to take Law as my major is my past, as what I've said formerly "My mom was sued by my own auntie", That tHing really prompted me to take law, (It might be sound like "Revenge" but it's true), on the other hand There are also many other things that inspired me... to be honest I love to be a judge, a lawyer, prosecutor and other profession as well, but I prefer Diplomat, Beacuse beinbg a Diplomat is very interesting, it offers glamorous, high paying(or High Salary) and of course prestigious,

    beside, we are responsible for the protection of people "in our country assigment" (or in the country where we assigned) therefore, we must manage good relation with the two country (Or we have to keep the good relationship both countries),

    So' the conclusion is this profession (or being a diplomat) is way more intersting and prestigious than others, That's why I want to be a Diplomat..


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    #2

    Re: Please help me to correct this...

    My Dream Job

    Before I tell you about my dream Job, let me tell you a bit about my childhood and all the things I've been through

    My Childhood
    I am the youngest child with 3 siblings, a sister and 2 brothers (But my younger brother has passed away), My Mom is a single parent, 'cuz My dad married another woman,when I was five years old,
    I spent my whole childhood in the village named ............ It's a small village around ..............(I intentionally put it blank), My childhood wasn't too special, CUz I was just a countryboy who lives in poverty, My mom used to be a small farmer who rents land to be planted and the harvest was absolutely based on nature, if it's drought(dry season) then we have no harvest...

    In addition, when I was at 5th grade, I was faced to a dreadful (gruesome) situation/fact, My mom was sued for somtething she didn't do, actually it's just a simple family case, and it shouldn't have been taken to the police, it's merely a little argument between my mom and my auntie and I have no idea why she should report it to the police, because it could be settled peacefully

    And when I was at Junior high school our life started to change when my beloved mom dared to start a new career as a tailor she has a wonderful talent, 'cuz she's totally decated, but when our life started to get better, we had to face the biggest loss in our life, my brother died of malpractice, it made our life miserable especially my mom, 'cuz He(my dead brother) was her favorite boy...

    I think it's enough about the pathetic stories, now I'll tell you my dream job, the thing that actually inspired me to take Law as my major is my past, as what I've said formerly "My mom was sued by my own auntie", That tHing really prompted me to take law, (It might sound like "Revenge" but it's true), There are also many other things that inspired me... to be honest I love to be a judge, a lawyer, a prosecutor and other profession as well, but I prefer Diplomat, Because being a Diplomat is very interesting, it offers glamor.high salary and of course prestige

    besides, we are responsible for the protection of people "in our country assignement" (or in the country where we assigned) therefore, we must manage good relation with the two countries(Or we have to keep the good relationship both countries),

    So' the conclusion, being a diplomat is way more intersting and prestigious than any other job, That's why I want to be a Diplomat..

    • Member Info
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    #3

    Re: Please help me to correct this...

    Is there any difference between AT the 5th grade and IN the 5th grade, AT the junior high school and IN the junior high school?

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